this is pretty good, please update it!

I'm reading backward through all the stories. You are number 14.

Interesting! You should continue!

GO GEORGE LUCAS!

You need to develop the plot a bit more...it's very predictable right now. Also, it's a bit of an obvious Marty-Stu self-insertion, isn't it?

Plus I think you should edit and take a look at your spacing, it's hard to read.

Otherwise it would become an interesting read! Hope this helps! Good luck!

begining sux ends terrific

That was actually pretty good. I've always sorta wanted to be one of them too! But is there more? I just seems incomplete!

THAT IS NOT HOW YOU SPELL ANNE MCCAFFREY! ANNE MACCAFFREY IS A GOD, DON'T SPELL HER NAME WRONG!

good besides that. Good plot

{Um...is there more?

Ok at least theres a little varison to the cluhe. This was on another version but a

little diffrent did you write that story?

Yawn.

Cobragirl I've been wondering the same thing:::Starts gaging at the memory::: your a good write just need to be more origanal I predicted it from begining to end before I even started reading it

This is probably because I despise self-insertion fanfics, but this story was awful. The blatant self-insertion, coupled with a weak, overused plot (new person joining the Animorphs) and poor formatting made for a tough read. How did this start out with a rating of 9.4?

Er...needs a bit of editing, and some more plot development..

ARRGGHH! No offence, but I HATE fanfics where fans stick themselves in as the main character. They almost ALWAYS end the same. I seriously suggest a rewrite.

It was okay. The story was well written but the idea, well, the idea's been done before.