Wooooooow! This story is amazing! This is definitely one of the best Sidious fics I've read. I love how you're able to pick out the human bits of him enough to make his romance believable, but in the end he is still a Sith lord.

Also, kudos for perfectly nailing the second person POV. :D

This is the one of the best kinds of OC story: one where the OCs are there primarily to make a point about the main (canon) character. And your Palpatine is hella scary, even more so because he's so young here. I didn't realize until I was writing this that neither of the OCs have names; I think that was a really strong choice on your part - both because it reinforces that this is not a story about anyone finding twu wuv with an OC and because it mirrors the way Palpatine must think about them, as being entirely below him. I'm babbling, I know, but what you should take away from this review is that I really enjoyed your story.

It's was really great to see some young Palpy!I'm loving his evilness, really fantastic plotline.

This. Is. Utterly. Brilliant! I love it! It's fantastic! Not much else I can say about it, truly. Palpatine is my favorite character in Star Wars, so this fanfic is even more of a bonus. And I rather like your choice for his first name. Dunno why, but it seems rather fitting.

Anyway, great job as always! Keep up the wonderful work!

This is absolutely wonderful.

It is at the same time a chilling horror story and one ridden with sadness as readers watch Palpatine's chance at a genuine relationship fall apart.

I like the depiction of love and it's result: it both turned Anakin to the dark side and banished all traces of humanity from Palpatine. Also, you did a great job with Palpatine's thoughts regarding the similar views of Jedi and Sith.

I've never thought much about a Sith's view of love- I kind of assumed that it fell under the category of 'passion', at least for the dark side (and was thereby accepted as part of the "sith-y-ness").

Hmmm...

Nice work on this one

: )

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This is a hauntingly chilling vignette. You've very successfully used the second-person perspective to make the reader imagine Palpatine with all his deviousness. I find it very interesting how you choose to start with Palpatine misunderstanding the Jedi view on attachments and illustrate his malevolence using a sexual relationship, as opposed to a power struggle. It's scary that Palpatine at twenty-four is already so twisted, to the extent that instead of just exposing his wife and her lover, he sets out wreak a horrifying revenge on a scale that dwarfs that of the initial transgression. We definitely see how he became the master manipulator of minds that he is in the SW saga.

I particularly liked the sentence "Frailty, thy name is Éamon Palpatine," although I can't put my finger on the literary device used here - not irony, for sure. Is there a name for it?

Great work! Possibly one of the best character studies of Palpatine I've seen!

very very powerful story...i'm not sure if i shld pity palpatine or be sad for him...

I really loved this. It was beautiful and the POV was perfect - the second-person with Palpatine is such an invitation for the reader to conspire with him.

Most of all I liked that he was too self-assured to see this coming; it makes sense.

And your quotes were marvellous too! _

Oh man, this is so chilling! It gives a great view into Palpatine's mind, but well... *shudders* He's one scary man!

Are you going to do such one-shots for more characters?

Still too lazy to log in xD

And indeed, I applaud the fact you have re-updated this. This version is a very big improvement, and I love the mirroring of the opening paragraph in the ending paragraph.

In the same way, I felt that a great deal of the way in which you use euphemisms or make tiny little innocuous observations (like how Palpatine opens the window to let in a light breeze) really adds flavor to a story. Palpatine is very subtle, and the choice of words really lends a nice touch to this particular story. Perhaps even reflecting the Master Manipulator whose story we are, after all, reading.

Regards,

-Cymru

Amazing! Simply amazing!

I love how you've carefully constructed Palpatine's relationship with his wife, his relationship with his friend, and the affair his wife was having with his friend. It actually made me feel a little sorry for him.

I loved the end. It's just so like him to get them to commit suicide because of the guilt crushing them into dust, and STILL look like the good guy!

Great job!