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BitterSweet41 9/1/11 . chapter 20
I thought it was only 20 chapters then i saw how many it was! 150 chapters! wow its really late here i love this book! thx for writing it!
BitterSweet41 9/1/11 . chapter 16
Amazing story! This is a really heavy Patagato story!

And i love Patty shes so cute!
Toa Coy 3/26/11 . chapter 150
this was a great story to read it, it has made me want to write my own digimon story. If you want to you could use my two OCs that travel around to different fandoms out there, here is a place you can reach me at
Dragonmanvirus0007 3/21/11 . chapter 15
She's not dead; she just de-digivolved into a Digiegg to help with the healing process.
BlackCat62 12/31/10 . chapter 26
That crazy gatomon was aunt gina wasn't it.
BlackCat62 12/23/10 . chapter 149
So the darkness is Neko and not Jack
BlackCat62 11/22/10 . chapter 18
The end of chapter 18 was sweet.
Japanlover69 11/2/10 . chapter 150
Hiya! been awhile and i am proud to say that that was a great ending! at first, i thought it wouldnt be good since it was only one chapter. i thought it would be rushed. but i was greatly surprised! pat yourself on the back chap! BUT! there are some mistakes i have to point out like last time. not a flamer blah blah you get the point right?

1. words. if you were standing in front of me right now, i would have hugged you! no more 'farewelled'! good job! but, there are still words you are making up. scaredly isnt a word and a few other words are made. be careful.

2. this had been bugging me for a while now. necko at first is an immortal. when the large snowball crushed him, he injured his legs. but, when he was crushed by a train, how come he comes up in one piece, not a broken bone?

3. characters still talk the same and act the same. kira troubled me. i didnt get her personality. you told me hers but i didnt see the detail of it. and when jack fell in love with her, she falls in love with him back just like that. it was random and cloudy.

4. the asylum where wendy was to visit her uncle. he shouldnt even be there if he was injured in the head. its something he couldnt help and he is not crazy! he does NOT need to be there! it is OFFENSIVE OFFENSIVE and OFFENSIVE.

5. romance is what the story is mostly about, but it can get annoying when the characters keep kissing for every little thing over and over again. it gets repetitve.

6. repeating is an issue. i cringe when i see the sentence "he was shocked at first, but then kissed back". you use that too much! it is good if you used it once! but not all the time. also, when demi's mother drowned, she does the heart thing and patty when she's about to drown, she does the same thing too. whoa!

7. *yawn* in every sentence is very annoying! also, when someone is nervous, they do st-st-stutterin. yes it is good to use, but not all the time! it is too obvious and also is annoying.

8. the families are horrible! patty's parents both die then come back to life. neko is an orphane with parents dead. moshi only lives with his father. deedee didnt know about her missing sister. paguya father left. demi's mother drowned. almost every family has something bad that happened.

9. your villans get annoying with their smiling. spider women and mummy dude smirked, grinned, and smiled in almost every sentence. we get it! they are smiling!

10. when a character dies, it is still sad. if i were them, i would just be like okay with it. i know they will be okay. also, where the fuck are neko's parents and moshi's. never explained!

11. the resturant gatomon and patamon goes to. not really romantic. sushi and ramen are japanese fast food.

*also, for the hell of it, when you introduced the characters morty and rose and so forth, i laughed a pretty fair laugh. reason why is because the book i am working on deals with two character named mortimer, morty for short, and rose being lovers. i thought was pretty fuuny.

thank you for the great stories. keep writing and i hope you keep writing more of it. cheerio! ( and dont make that lame joke again)
bonebreaker99 10/31/10 . chapter 150
That was awesome. I wonder what fic that is either the midquel or the sequel I should read next, your choice!
Spyro Nights 10/31/10 . chapter 150
I can not believe its over I loved it so seriously Patty's digievolution is , wicked, great, cool, no the story was...BLOODY WICKEDLY WICKEDLY WICKED!hurry up with the sequel(s)
PataGato Guardian 10/30/10 . chapter 150
Awsome...totaly awsome. I really enjoyed this story and I'm heartbroken to see it end. But where one story ends, another begins. I'm really looking forward to more adventures between Patty and Neko. Thanks for a heartwarming story.
Lord Pata 10/30/10 . chapter 150
You know? I will miss this fic a lot, I read each chapter ever since you started it, I reviewed them all, I enjoyed it all. It will be hard to not see it as updated anymore *bawls* T_T

But I'm sure you will come up with more good fics, also you have new characters to work with namely Jack and Patty's younger siblings, Wendy's siblings, Tani, and also Jack and all of his friends since they didn't had much participation on this one

I wonder if Neko gave James the old big brother speech about that if he hurts Tani he will face him? XD

Also it was night that Patty now has a new digivolution which is Mikemon

Thank you very much for have shared this wonderful fic, you truly earned the title of King of PataGato D
PataGato Guardian 10/28/10 . chapter 149
I anticipated that Neko would be involved...but I did'nt expect him to warp digivolve to VenomMyotismon. I can't wait for the next chapter.
Minwolf 10/28/10 . chapter 149
I was not expecting Neko to become a MaloMyotismon. Something tells me that Gatomon and Patamon aren't going to be happy about that at all.

Then again they'll probably be able to sense that something is different about him then the one they fought in the past.
Lord Pata 10/28/10 . chapter 149
You have to be kidding me! Cherubimon's Husband was a VenomMyotismon? O_O

Somehow I doubt Magnadramon will like that o.o
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