great story!

At first haft part of the story, I was suspect that Lightning might had already die years ago and leaved Hope stand on his own behind (with her gunblade as legacy) _”. Glad that she still alive.

This oneshot looked more like a prolog for a story. I know that you intent to make this just oneshot. However, I think the ending of the story leaved opened-end to possibility for make another sequel or prequel. Even prolong the whole story more than one chapter. To clarify the reasons behind Lightning’s decision how come she had to go.

I still like this work for well written plot even the ending is sad. Nevertheless, in case of you have plan to create sequel or more chapter I would prefer happy ending one. _ (if you could put it in the story.)

BTW, according to your descried in the story (not in the writer’s message at the end of the page), Hope “ looking up” and “glanced up” at Lightning. That mean he is still shorter than her, right. I think Hope in his nineteen years old supposed to taller than Lightning already. Since his father rather tall and his mother was average height he should as tall as his parent, too. (Lightning might taller than average women but still shorter than most grow up men). If I misunderstood, then I apologize for the wrong assumption

Damn! You almost make me cry!

Hiks...hiks...what a beatiful story!

Great job...

hiks...

Anyways, update your another story, kay

It's a very nice story, but I can't help but think something crucial went unsaid. Why is Light so depressed? I look forward to any other stories like this you feel like churning out. Ciao.

Very nicely written and the dialogue is superb. :) Great job.

so sad (

I enjoyed your work very much! I like the portrait you've painted with an older Hope, and how there is still the glimmer of the kid he used to be. Still hasn't learned his lesson with getting too close to her, huh? I hope he never does.

I am with the previous poster though. Lightning seemed happy enough (as happy as Lightning can be lol) after her encounter with Hope. And I LOVE angst (boy do I) but the end seemed a little tacked on! I hope you will write a little more to define the path her thoughts are on and why she seems to be so inconsolably hopeless. She hasn't lost them yet, so she'd still have something to live for, no?

It's nicely written.

Angsty but kind of realistic. I can really imagine Hope doing that for her, since he admires her a lot, and Light being fond of the boy since he reminds her of his younger self. A good teacher-student relationship :)

But... why did Light act like that in the last part?.. Is there a deeper reason behind it, aside from what she said?