Don't be lazy. Write a summary.

Actually not bad, but if you do run an online RPG (trust me, I have lotsa experience with these) play-format isn't always the best way to go.

Concerning this piece: I understood nuno of this... sorry. -

I was thinking, maybe you should post up different styles of your writings, if you know what I mean ...

Just a note to you all, this was based off a massive RPG i started and actually finished. It all took place many moons ago at . Thats why I did the style the way it was, since thats how the RPG was played. This is also my first fanfic in many a years. And yeh, its cliché because I stole elements from different gundam series here and there. I hope to complete and refine this sucker some day and make it alot better. And if you think that was cliché just wait for the unsuspected surprise colony drop that happens...but will it be a Zeke or a Feddy who pushes the button? SIEG ZEON!

After several days of staring at the same format found in most works I am much relieved by this writer's particular and (thus far as I have seen) unique style (as compared with many other works). Although I cannot imagine exactly how the author thought it would turn out, for me, the narrative dances about the page much in the style of a documentary that one might see on the History Channel (in my opinion a very good thing). Personally, I feel that the author would do well to utilize this method of story-telling even further; attempt to bring it to another level in its style. The story-line was less appealing to my tastes, a bit too many cliches and the inescapable feeling that I've seen all this somewhere before with only slightly different specifics (but opinions are as various and falliable as French Popes)Still, the original style of this piece was invigorating; I hope to see how the author advances it.

why doesn't anyone write something like an invasion from the Jupiter Empire? They have weird ass suits i swear... it'll be cool for an interplanetary battle .

Well, the switch from one format (narrative) to another (script) didn't sit too well with me, but you've got a good story here. It also might be nice to get some character descriptions, too. It's a bit jarring to realize I don't know what these people look like at all. _;

Berz.

very interesting, i hope you get read mine as well, more please of this fic

Interesting Mr. Douglas, quite interesting. I must commend you on your writing ability, but alas,you're nowhere as good as me, the great and powerful Sarge!