probably wrong but im guessing ash ketchum XD

On the subject of Amos being left behind-

Karuta had a giant arbok on hand. It could have easily transported all three of them out of reach of the muk.

If dokuga is too big for the tunnel then Amos' typhlosion could have carried him out.

Also, Karuta should not get away with all he has done. The crimes are far too great to ignore them in favor of a happy ending.

Murder. Is. Unforgivable.

I'll give you a cookie if you a sequel or another story like this

I demand a sequel.

Could you enable PMs to yourself? I'd very much like to talk about this fic over PM. I find the realist perspective on it utterly facinating. Especially that Ditrean stuff. Can't tell if it's a drug or some perverse form of gene splicing. Probably both. Anyway, please enable PMs. I'd like to hear more about the inner workings of this AU, and especially about Ditrean. First rule of being an author on this site, never make yourself exceedingly difficult to contact.

Hah, now that...that was an interesting read. I am currently trying to write my on Pokemon fic, it's a little dark, but yours just blew mine out of the water. Just from reading this I have seen so many ways I could change my story in order to improve it.

Now, I usually stay away from long fics like this, but your story just drew me in, it demanded me to finish it. You have a very good way of making your characters realistic. Most stories have the jerk-face turn good at the end and run off with the girl, happily ever after. Unfortunately for me, that's where my story is heading, but this isn't about me, it's about you.

I personally hope that Amos survived, though I know his odds were slim. One big thing I did hope for was that the murderer in the first chapter would end up not being Karuta, though I suppose that was a silly hope. Karuta, now there's a unique character if I ever saw one. The story of his life, how he viewed himself, all the repressed memories, you made a character I would like to punch in the face, yet I also pity, more than anything. Reading as he relived the moment of the car crash was just...powerful, there is no doubt of your writing ability.

Another great part was, amongst all the seriousness and gloom, you managed to fit some humor, showing that Amos was more than just a walking punching machine, and making it all the worse when we realize he was left behind.

I have to say, a huge part of your story was it's realism, the fact that not all people liked the rules of the 'upper world,' the terrible things that the people underground participated in. I can understand it, and see it happening.

One thing I can also see, and hope for, is a sequel to this story. Karuta is alone, wandering, and Nozomi...she won't be able to sit idly by in her home for long, even with her childhood friend there. She's seen things most trainers would never dream off, and she has killed someone, even though she doesn't remember it. I guess I'm saying there's a lot of potential, and...I guess I'm hoping for a slightly happier ending, even though that's not how the world works...

"The world isn't right because you want it to be, or because it should be...the world is cruel, you need to open your eyes and realize it," Just a quote I feel fits...

So there it is, my thoughts on your story, thank you for writing it, it's something that really makes you think. Keep up the good work.

- Ano-Chan

I was looking for a long, well-written pokemon story starring an OC that fits under the Tragedy genre when I found this. It may be old, but let's not let an fanfic's age get in the way of a good reading, right? ;D

I have to say... I actually quite like Karuta. Amos was pretty funny, even though what became of him in the end is a mystery: whether he survived or had died. But I'm sure that's a hole that's left for us readers to fill with our own ideas, right? That's alright, leaving a question unsolved makes a story seem more epic, in my opinion, lol. XD

Nozomi... was pretty much just plain annoying to me, with her immaturity and her close-minded view on things, plus refusing to accept that most of the things that have happened were her own fault. That, and I'm sorry, she seems like a freaky stalker at the beginning when she's adamant on following Karuta around. o_o

But overall, this story was worth the tw day read! 8D I really, really like it, and the reality that you would not be able to find in the happy children view of Pokemon world in the anime. Good job!

That poor, poor Marowak D:

I don't like Karuta, but then again his actions just multiply how every other eager trainer sounds like a douche.

Girl eating snake, nonchalant and apathetic goth guy, easily angered girl and a pokemon who likes boobs...What a motley crew :3

It kind of gives me that creepy vibe you get when you read the newspaper and find out some unknown man killed a young girl down at the woods or something...Reading on D:

Well, at least the first chapter was sort of explained. It's not a "realistic" world where everybody can get away with murder, it's just one psycho. Which is, actually, pretty realistic.

Although it does create a question of why, if this guy is crazy enough to kill a girl just because she wasn't a good trainer/attacked him for killing her Rattata, why was he so patient with presumptuous five-badge-dude and (somewhat) patient with overreacting-facepunch-chick. Hm. Maybe he's only a psycho at certain times of the month.

This story is really well-written and interesting. But just judging from this first chapter I disagree that this is a realistic fic. A lot of people think "Wow, this show is really lighthearted to the point of ridiculous; it would be more realistic if it was really dark," but there's kind of a middle ground. In your view of a realistic Pokemon it's realistic for a guy to kill a girl for no reason except that he can? I mean, yes, murders happen in real life, but they're hardly every-day, shrug-worthy events. So... yeah. I kind of think this is just as unrealistic as the show, but it's definitely more entertaining, so I'll keep reading.

Several years on (I think), I've reread the story, and it has reaffirmed my love for this story. I love how each character got their conclusion. (Although Amos' one leaves little to be desired... but, it's realistic in its tragedy. Even if the ending is somewhat open-ended, it's hard to see another fate befelling him.) I think I said that I would have loved a sequel, I still stand by that _; But this story is amazing as it is.

This story is great, funny and puts an original twist on the Poke'mon world by making it realistic. Kinda reminds of that one pokemon episode where Nurse Joy says that Ash's pikachu just had too much eletricity. When I first watched it(I was 10 back then) I felt the same way as Ash. Now when I'm twice as old and have a job, I can see Nurse Joy's point of view. The only thing that bothered me was when that one girl got killed just because she was an amatuer. Oh well...

Know that this is one of the few Pokemon stories which stand out in my brain.

I add it to my favorites in recognition of its wonderfulness.