This one-shoot is both breathtaking and sorrowful. It really depressed me with the abuse that Harry had to endure. It was nice, though, that Harry had someone concern for him (the little girl). Though, I find it ironic how a little girl got the hint that something was wrong with Harry and not any of the adults.

I like the writing style that you have here, You were detailed in explaining whhat was going on, while at the same time, finding a balance in both blaming and sympathizing Dumbledore for his mistake.

I recommend a few things, though. Perhaps provide information on the following: 1) what was the reaction of the little girl when she found out what happened? 2 and my favorite): what was Severus's reaction to how Harry was treated and killed?

Overall, great one-shoot. I wish you luck in your other works!

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