|Reviews for Bottom of the Vial|
| Origami-Pegasus 3/31/13 . chapter 1
You switched tenses occasionally, but I do love how you captured Kowalski's voice. Very nice.
You also sometimes used the wrong form of "your". In addition, you switched persons (first to second) while not having the narrator speak directly to the reader.
What I meant in the last sentence was this: (They're not all that well written and rushed but I was tired and forgot to proofread).
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| robins princess starfire 10/9/11 . chapter 2
interesting start please update again soon
| pomcookie 10/9/11 . chapter 2
aaaw, i want this story to go on! please don't stop!
| 00Quinn00 7/5/11 . chapter 1
| Invasion-of-my-Heart 9/10/10 . chapter 2
CONTINUE PLEASE! I love it!
| aqqqwe 4/7/10 . chapter 2
I appreciate my mentioning in your note prior to this addition; I'm certain that you'll do well with this on your own! Besides, judging from the scheme of things, who would I have been to step into the middle of this canvas?
To sum up my experience with this chapter in a few words, I'd have to say that I felt a lingering presence of missed happiness and/or opportunites. The way you've portrayed Kowalski and his gradual longing for his leader's attention is very poignant, indeed; especially when you throw in Private's chipper and innocent mood into the mix. He's just absolutely spoiled already, and it's most likely having a great effect on Kowalski.
Also, despite my admiration in Rico's company and sympathy towards Kowalski, I couldn't help but shake the feeling that it didn't mean much to the intellectual. Sure, he has assistance, and who cares if he might have someboday to empathize with? That help can only go so far when the affectionate intentions originate from that of a near-mute fellow. In short, my imagination sees fit that it conjures various scenarios in which Kowalski remains just as alone as he was before Rico entered the picture. Besides, there's always that possibility that the weapons expert may not have the slightest clue as to what Kowalski is talking about, or what his true intentions are.
In fact, in this case, maybe Rico should be the one to worry about. If he is, indeed, unaware of Skipper and Kowalski's past, then I can only imagine what will happen once the beans are spilled.
Anyway, I feel as though I've rambled as much as I possibly can manage. Nonetheless, I truly enjoy what you've created here. and it will, without a doubt, grow into something worth remembering, I think. A lot of chances for this to be an absolute mess of emotions and hidden tension!
I leave you with my thanks in all that you've provided. Always looking for more!
| Invasion-of-my-Heart 4/1/10 . chapter 1
I like the fluff. It all ties so well. Very good job.
| sonicaljulio2 3/31/10 . chapter 1
this was a good intro im very sure this will be an exelent story just like the others you have wrote
| AAAAAAAA123 3/31/10 . chapter 1
How did they get to Antartica?
| Scifiguy1999 3/31/10 . chapter 1
Wow, that is all I can say, just wow.