I really liked this story, and am glad to find one that doesn't have Sela dieng in the end

Things I liked:

Very good story line, action flowed well.

Beautiful punctuation, only a few minor spelling mistakes. Very rare these days.

Things I didn't like:

I have major problems with the dialogue. The characters in this story talk like they are 14 year old pre-pubescent 20th century children instead of 24th century adult Starfleet officers. You have Beverly saying, "Remember, Jean-Luc, it's kinda hard to talk to someone who's unconscious!" Kinda? Beverly NEVER talked like this at any time. Neither did the other characters. I would recommend rewatching the episodes and movies to get a feel of how the characters actually spoke, and then rewrite the dialogue for this story. This story is worth redoing.

Fantastic

Incredible

moving

I long for great Tom and Will Riker stories and you've made my wish come true. Thank you

Very nice, very nice. Even better once you explained to me who everybody was ;) I am truly in awe of your mad Star Trek skillz, and simultaneously scared by the knowledge that there are people out there who know even more about that Universe than you. Keep it up!

Brad