 Rev 2/6/02 . chapter 1 God, where to start. It could have been better, putting it mildly. It could have made a good action/adventure if they'd stayed on the island for a while, or a good romance...I don't know what the hell I could call this piece. Nick and Alex were way too out of character, and you were in to much of a hurry to get to the next scene. Slow down a bit, add something to build up to the main action. And try to find one freakin plot and stick with it! |