What. The. Hell. I read halfway through this crap fest and I can't go anymore. My brain HURTS. Nothing they said made sense. Your grammar is atrocious. A crap from my ass could create better sentence structure than you could. You posted an author's note in the middle of the chapter! THAT is a big no-no.

And is it Martin or Marin? You don't seem able to decide. And also you don't seem to know what their gender is. Is it a man or a woman? I would a assume it was a man but you kept calling them a she at some points. And wait. Is Remy gay? He seems to be seriously flirting (or I think he is, your spelling and grammar make it hard to understand anything that is happening) with Martin.

Excuse me while I go scream into a pillow.

Well... I like your taste in stores and movies! I have to say this story has promise! not that I would know I'm a failure at writing I'm better at just making them I my head they never come out right! But I am serious this story does have promise! Well I hope your happy with this review! Oh one more thing..., WRITE YOU GOD DAMN STORY ALREADY YOUCSNT JUST LEAVE THE STROY LIKE THT! other then that were good!