She-Ra can`t leave crystal castle? A nice little twist. I am looking forward to everyone`s perspective.

This is a very good story. I am loving the elements of the past and the future coming together. Well done.

Is the end of the Horde in sight? Hopefully.

Something snapped withing Sarah's mind as she struggled hopelessy against her bonds. They gave way suddenly. "Huh? Oh well, the Horde still makes shoddy materials I see."

Some things never change I see. ;)

Ahh, the minions. Nicely done for their ineptness.

Two figures burst out of a glowing disc in the Valley of the Lost, a place where no one came to and no one left.

“Left, Broomie, left! Oh, diaries my! Where are we?”

“Don’t tell me! We took a wrong turn while try to avoid Antenna’s eye beams.”

(At Crystal Castle)

The glowing figure concentrated and sighed. : This is the best I can do. I hope they can find and rescue Bow and Adora before Bright Moon falls. Not much time left!:

That was too funny.

Hordra is a cruel one isn`t she? Well done. :)

The future does not bode well for Bow and Adora.

So Adora isn`t Sarah? I am wonderfully confused.

Oh. I cannot wait to find out what has happened to Adora. A well done intro.

Interesting.

I really like it!
She-ra was always one of my favorite cartoons, so this brings back memories. update soon.

This was great, I loved it and can't wait to read the rest of it. The characters were great and the concept is intriguing. The dialogue flows and is believable and the story does not drag at all.

Cool! :)

I like your set up for this and hope there is more coming to this soon. :)

Good job. This was a very interesting chapter. I can't wait for the next update!