Isn't it impossible to catch a Totodile in the wild? Just had to point that out. Other then that, good story! Please update.

great start, its really good.

Totodile, for the win! :D Great chapter and excellent in capturing Silver's personality!

So going on about how attractive she is is not actually that interesting and is generally screwing over your sentence structure.

And now random Japanese. This is heading nowhere good, and at a pretty fast clip at that.

[Feeling mischievous, she lured his attention away with a seductive batting of her eyes. He glowered, but couldn't look away. She didn't understand why, but it never failed to stop boys. She didn't think she looked too special, although to the average person she'd have seemed crazy for thinking that. ]

Ugh. I'm just going to stop here.