Thank you for updating!

I'm glad you found your direction for this story. Looking forward to seeing future chapters.

Awww, poor Mello!

Intriguing! I look forward to what's next!

You are amazing

You've brought these characters so life!

Poor Mello! And wow, Near is such a cold-hearted douche! But then again he must have his reasons,

"This is an institution for children who have nothing and therefore have everything to gain."

Now I know what he and Mello fight so hard for the title of 'L'

This is so great! I wanna read more!

please please please update!

i am loving this!

Loved it! Glad to have Near appear.

Wow, this is... what I mean is... I just want to say...

Dang it.

I guess what I'm trying to get at is that there really aren't words to describe what you're doing here. You've taken Mello, this wonderful, beautiful, indescribable character, and managed to bring him to life in only ten chapters, with still more to come. As I was reading through this beautiful piece of work, I paused for a moment and noticed something very strange: I was crying. I was literally sobbing my heart out for this... fictional character, because your words just captured his very essense so well. I honestly feel like I could be reading about a real person out there, an actual little seven-year-old boy who lost everyone and everything, without even getting a choice in the matter. And then I thought about my own little brother, who's just that age, and, well, let's just say it didn't help my tear factor at all. I know it's fanfiction, but it's still a real story, a real piece of writing, and I think it's works like these that fill our hearts and inspire us. When I got to the part about Mello's older brother, and how much he loved him, my heart just broke., because we never know who we're going to lose in life. It just hit me hard...

I think this review has gone on long enough, because I'm starting to tear up again. I'll close with this, a quote:

"But words are things, and a small drop of ink, falling like dew upon a thought, produces that which makes thousands, maybe even millions, think."

This has certainly made me think. Never, ever stop writing, because you have a voice that needs to be heard.

Sincerely,

-Eggy

I really like the way you see life through mellos eyes and thoughts. I'm looking forward to the continuation of this story.

Wow...are you like some sort of genius?...lol...no, I mean like seriously...you're too smart...This is so Mello...everything..every word...and Near..wow...that's the most believable conversation I've read yet...although it was much more cruel and cold...I like this very much...especially where Near starts to make his appearence...now things are really heating up...

Wow...This is so awesome...Mello is so awesome...you're so awesome...I just love a lustful Mello longing for Near...and Matt isn't that bad...I bet he could get a girl if he tried..I mean he's a cute redhead for crying outloud...how could anyone not love him?...anyways I hope that he gets to be with Near soon...before he explodes...lol...anyways keep up the good work...update!

I absolutely love Chapter "Near". The characters are very in character and the interaction between Mello and Near was so adorable. :)

I'm entirely in love with your story. Your portrayal of Mihael, Wammy, L, and even the minor characters are so beautiful. You are doing an excellent job!

I suppose Mello and Mr. Wammy are talking in German the whole time, right? Because if they do, this sentence ""Your name, is not really Michael is it?" The man says quietly." doesn't really make much sense because Germans pronounce Michael in the exactly same way Croats pronounce Mihael. Mello wouldn't be able to understand what is Mr. Wammy aiming at.

Interesting so far, I'll continue reading. But you just have a few errors in your Croatian. "Probuditi se, Mihael" is the infinitive of the verb, and you want the imperative "Probudi se." The same thing with "Doći…". You want "Dođi..." Oh, and another one. "Dok mi se opet sretnem, Mihael." This sentence has apsolutely no meaning in Croatian. I suppose you meant "Dok se opet ne sretnemo" or "Opet ćemo se sresti." but I can't be sure with the provided sentence.

Wow..I just love how accurate to the time and place everything is...I could only imagine what a pain it must be to plan this...but anyways I think it's awesome..so keep up the good work!...