|Reviews for Dream State|
| silvereyed angel 4/17/10 . chapter 3
wow.. Nick is depressed (then again, that IS perfectly logical.. though the death of his brothers is illogical..)
It's Illogical, I can't have it!
No comment on the 'we've broken Nick' comment of last review? denial much? haha..
But seriously this chapter was dark, gruesome and really, really angsty.. and you seem to kill them again and again and again in those last parts of the chapter..
Nick's thoughts are black, as his blood is red..
he's going to be cutting himself, a cutter, a scarrer.. Though this time, the reason for it is almost plausible.. something any human, and especially sensetive Nick, could fall into
Not saying I like it, but it adds to the angst
I didn't get the LA hiding, what's better thing.. What are they going to do, where is Nick now? So many words and yet, you give me so little to work with here!
Don't you understand I NEED more? It's not a question of want, I need to know the plot, the brilliancy, the ANGST.. which is reminding me of who I am.. Just a tad now..
ghost!Joe and ghost!Kevin scare me.. and I feel the grave need to smack them on their heads and make them apologise, the real Joe and Kevin would never do such things, Nick should know that!
as you can tell by my constant ranting about nothing, I really like it thus far, I just want things to start happening (the slow torture is TORTURE to me, which is brilliant on itself but kind of annoying to me..)
That WAS a compliment, on your ability of slow torture
:) I'm really glad you have inspiration for this, your way of expression is so unique Chibi..
I love it, so much.
I LOVE YOUTOO, amazing creepy person of CHIBINESS..
| silvereyed angel 4/16/10 . chapter 2
-waves hand in front of Nick's eyes-
um.. chibs.. not to ruin your evil-partay, since I'm part of it and lovin' it, but..
I think we broke him.. as in, really badly broke him :S -hugs Nick- (no reaction)
O.o... uh oh..
Guess I shoul've expected it, after all the evilness you (okay given, and I) put him through.. Beaten by his own brothers, killing his own brothers, kidnapped multiple times, hurt, pained, tortured, Body-changes, marks, cuts, more torture..
but Nicky -whines- there have been good things! Like Belle and you, in breathing.. Such a beautiful story and the love your brothers feel for you even though they're about to die in this one! They love you, as do we.. As does your mom, even though Big Man things she's loony!
I thought it was really nice, though kind of a filler thing.. but I don't care, it makes the awesomeness longer..
As you made the torture before the.. you know.. BOOM! longer, you just draw out their waiting to death..
Which is so cool, apart from the fact that you are killing them! :)
And I am really curious as to where Nick is/is going.. they were on a boat and now he's in a room, his thoughts are kind of blurry, aren't they? (though that was to be expected)
But he can hear his brothers! BROTHERLY BONDS! (see, Nick, a good thing!) even though it are voices of his scarred imagination that acuse him of killing them.. It's still cool he can hear them! :) it's sweet and angsty at the same time..
you sure you can't make longer chapters.. (because I'm sure I can't make longer reviews, cause this one is HUGE!)
| Snowfallxo 4/15/10 . chapter 2
it's so sweet that nick can hear joe and kevin in his head. like, their brotherly bond is still there, even though you killed them. so awesome.
Nick: You try it. It's not.
Kevin: At least we're still here! You're not actually dead, remember!
Snowy: Knowing chibiyu, that moment could be soon, Nicholas.
Joe: Then we'll be all together again... yay!
Nick: Shut the hell up, Joseph.
on that note...
shortness is a little annoying, I like loong chapters and lots of excitingness! not that this is lacking, it definitely has angst, and me likes angst...
| silvereyed angel 4/15/10 . chapter 1
oh Joe and your awesome notes to yourself.. -sighs dreamily-
sad.. no other thing to say, now is there? nope. none.
Evil ending, evil story, evil Nick that turned good and Evil chibi that now makes him hurt..
Silver: I'm sorry, but you're screwed no matter what, we KNOW that already, can I at least make it better for one of us and actually enjoy this?
Nick: sure, go ahead, find entertainment in my pain.. Why don't you make me like it! Make me love the pain, there's nothing much I could possibly loose any other way..
Silver: I think you have driven him over the edge a little chibs.. though his idea seems cool.. I mean, if you killed your brothers, wouldn't you think you deserved the pain and wouldn't you love it..
Yes, I am trying to make this review longer then the chapter itself, but I realise I have to ramble on a hell of a lot to do that..
So I'll just say that I KNOW this will turn out in a way that will make us cry and possibly, laugh through our tears? who knows? only your mind does..
Wait.. Nick.. you are in our minds.. you can find out! :o
haha, I loved it and I can't wait for the actual sequel (since this was a prologue) (maybe you should make a prequel too.. XD)
okay then, write on!
| snowzy 4/14/10 . chapter 1
of course it's going to be freaking tear jerking, hello, JOE AND KEVIN ARE DEAD.
sigh... you're unfair to these boys.
so update and make it better? :D