A amazing story, could use a LITTLE more detail like instead of saying He bashed his skull in with his fist I would say '' Mag, fueled by insane rage, pulled back his fist, clenching so hard he made his knuckles white, and slammed his fist into the mans face, As blood spurted out, Mag pulled back his other fist, and slammed into the mans face, it repeated this way, over and over, mag, going insane, oblitirating this mans face gave him insane joy, and with each blow, Mag would smash faster, harder, and more savagly, until the mans face was dislocated, brused, bleeding, and chunky, Mag had blood on his face too... the other mans blood...

OK, final verdict, 8/10. Not a bad mark, but you can do better. Try not to rush your fics or the romance. You have a good thing going, and then you just kill it. Try not to do that please. And your proboably thinking "Who the hell is this punk?" Well just so you know, I'm a proffesional reviewer.

Good day

Okay, I'm sorry, But I'm going to have to give you a great big, What in the fuck happend? No seriusly, what the hell did happen, no offense, but you rush your romance way to much.

Wow. Not bad. Not bad at all. Sad about Chain though, I'm gonna miss her. And holy shit, this is proboably one of the bloodiest fights I have ever read. But please, do continue, for you seem to have a knack for it, no offense. So yes, you've sparked my intrest, so I'l keep reading.

Sincerly Corey

This was a great fan fiction and it was very interesting

I liked your ending

magnificent chapter 5

loveed chapter 4

good I like the change in plot

I love thsi chapter

Awsome first chapter

I liked it

I also like chain dying

didn't really like chain

I haven't finished the game yet so this is kinda weird. but who cares weird is my middle name.

nice chapter

This is a good story! Lots of fighting...I don't mind the blood and violence though - they are having a war, after all. Who are the Selenians anyway? Besides that, when a read this, it kinda reminds me of the movie, the Patriot...

Great story! I liked how the action went, and I love the game, so this story was all the better. Great work writing it!

I just wanna know: Have you read MY story lately, because I didn't quit.

nice fic...cant wait to read the rest

Not bad. Can't wait to read the rest!