Your story jumps too much. Pay more attention to setting and timelines, as well as biological accuracy. It takes a considerable amount of time beyond 2 weeks for a woman to feel the blossoming life inside her. Your dialog is extremely basic, and the entire situation seems like a desperate attempt to prove yourself as a writer. Improve your skills beyond simple literacy, and learn to understand what it is that you are working with-namely your characters. This story sounds suspiciouly like a soap opera, with only the names changed. You could have at least attempted to make the characters sound something like they should, even as difficult as it is to truly gather Trent's personality.

I LIKE IT!

omg its so cute! hurry up and write, damnit!

Finally Trent and Daria are together and have a hott update

Um...story was all right, but...who are these people! They're all out of character totally and completely, even if Daria did come back from college.

you are so sad... asif you would write porn about cartoons... get a life mel you ratter

Ummm...I'm sorry if I sound rude or anything, but this story was pretty bad. It's completely out-of-charcter for everyone involved, especially Daria and Trent. Also, FYI, a woman won't start feeling morning sickness until at least 1 month after she becomes pregnant. And it also takes about a month after conception for a pregnancy test to work...two weeks is way too soon.

Good Plot line i like it keep them coming

First of all, there is NO foetus after two weeks- there isn’t even an embryo. She would not be fainting, throwing up of feeling fatter at this stage of a pregnancy, unless she was also suffering from food-poisoning and obesity at the same time. Simple biology and information easily come by to anyone with a biology textbook or and internet connection.

The characters you are talking about seem to share a history with the characters of “Daria”, but not the same attitudes, mannerisms or personalities. The idea of Daria and Trent ‘hooking-up’ at some point in the future is a popular one, and one that I myself favour, but not in the circumstances of which you are portraying. Admittedly, some people are changed by different situations, one of the most significant being moving away from home, but this would not give everybody in the town a personality overhaul.

Better research, proof-reading and a better familiarity with the basic storyline of the show would help you create a better-rounded story. And there is only room to improve.

The story has potencial, but you can't seem to follow one train of thought. How is it possible for Daria to be talking to Trent on the PHONE and then he would hold her hand in the middle of the conversation? Did he just beam up to her appartment? And no woman can know if she's pregnant within a two weeks of having sex, much less be fainting the day after. Get your facts straight. And you could use a beta reader. If you're unsure of what to say on a story, ask someone you trust. It's better to read a well-thought story than a half-baked one.

You made Daria a little too promiscuous

Okay... now who's gunna tell Jane?

Okay, first of all, morning sickness does not happen the day after you have sex.

And the characters aren't in character. Daria is not the type to just have sex randomly. If you want to say that college or her experiences have changed her, you have to say WHY. Give some explanation.

And for the love of God, proof-read.

I liked it until Trent proposed - it's way too fast.

Plus, I don't think he would've bought a ring until after he knew she was pregnant.

Cool story glad to see that you are cranking out more chapters for it. I would really like to see where this is headed. Nice job