Ok. I feel like being overly critical today... _

There are way too many spelling errors! Jeez, you could at least look over it once. "u s" should be "u's" in the disclaimer. "than", "diomond", and "spacificly" should be "then", "diamond", and "specifically", in that order in the third section. In the fourth section, "griping" should be "gripping", I believe, the correct "sapphire" is carelessly misspelled as "saphire", and the wrong "unexsistant" is righted as follows: "unexistant". Luckily for you, you spelled "assuming" right, and in the fifth paragraph "reaches" is correct, along with all other words. Good for you. One last spelling error in sixth paragraph: "alot" should be "a lot". That's all for spelling. _

This story was hard to follow in a few parts, with the changing points of view and dialogue formats (spelling mistakes not included). Take a format and go with it. Try writing in the omnicient point of view (Soi thought, Nakago said, etc). 'Action' asterisks... (*looks back* *continues to gripe*) should be used sparingly, and you did an okay job on that. Next topic, please.

Overall, a low-to-average story. Sorry I couldn't say anything better. By the way, you can blame T-Virus, who told me to type all this stuff, for this review. Ha ha ha.

heh. hehehe. BWAHAHAHA! i hope he catches you and shoves your head in a toilet! j/k j/k... don't come after me. you need to get your brain straight though. sheesh! *pours bottle of purple hair dye on her hair* now i look like 2-D. i'm sooooooooooo cool. i feel like blabbering on and on about annoying stuff just for the pure heck of it. *Murdoc walks in and pours a bucket of water on her* ACK! my purpleness! *turns and sees Murdoc behind her with the empty bucket and laughing his head off* Murdoc Niccals! i'm gonna get you! *chases after him and ends up getting tripped and falling on him* hehehe *bangs on his head while sitting on him* take that you evil onion! BWAHAHA!

Atashitachi wa chikyu o osaero zo!

'-_-' T-Virus '_'

CF:*googly eyes* THAT IS SOOOOOO CUTE! I wish Nakago would think of me that way... _

The word is nonexistant. And Nakago is *extremely* OOC. Like "Love of the Icy", it's good, but it has a bunch of spelling and grammar mistakes. Try getting a beta reader (someone who proofreads your fics before you post them). I'm willing to volunteer! Oh, by the way, Fushigi Yuugi can be spelled either way. No need to be rude. .

Look at this, I'm so desprat for reviews that I'm reviewing my own story. Come on people, review, please *big watery puppydog eyes*. See, I'm pathetic.