|Reviews for Sorry|
| Enbrethiliel 12/8/12 . chapter 1
I don't mind that Frank seems "out of character" because you're right that it's plausible that he'd be different when alone with Kristen. But I don't know about Kristen. We've seen her alone with Gary in one episode and it was implied that she was alone with David in another; she comes across as flirty and not really serious about going steady with one guy. I think your premise has real potential, but that Kristen needs more fleshing out.
Also, I don't really think having their thoughts in italics is really necessary. I'd say your dialogue and descriptions are strong enough for the subtext to be clear. )
Will you be continuing this? It would be interesting to see how you make it fit other episodes, especially since Frank would have more to be jealous about than Kristen.
| beauty0102 8/31/10 . chapter 1