Really well written, it has an almost poetic flow to it. Very deep emotional stuff with lots of feelings.

An excellent oneshot, love your description of omega, though i feel the danger of shepard is pushed a bit too far

Your Morinth fics are my favorites. You worried that something about this felt flat? Well, it feels nice and curvy to me.

I enjoyed this. In the game, Morinth isn't a particularly sympathetic character, but you've managed to make her one here, and that's a good thing.

Brilliant writing. Despite sympathizing with her plight and agreeing with her decision to flee, I always scoffed at Morinth's combat ability; after devouring all those victims to supposedly empower herself, she's still only as strong as a single Justicar. You managed to make me forget about that element of her entirely, and in place enabled me to empathize with her and look at the world through her eyes regardless of whether or not I agree with her actions. I think one of the best aspects of this piece is how you portrayed her perspective -after- being recruited, which changed the dynamic and her entire sense of being entirely: instead of focusing on her being a voracious predator on the run from her species, you forced me to imagine her as she's trying to find her place as Shepard's ally (which, since I never recruited her, I never thought about). I also love the way you ended it: others will disagree with me, but a tale that leaves you feeling empty and hungering for more (because of how it concluded, NOT because it lacked a conclusion) is often best ending there is, when done masterfully, which you definitely did.

Beautiful insights, beautiful phrasing, a beautiful story!

Honestly, I think this is the best Morinth tale that I have ever read period. You completely captured her so beautifully, the growth, her transition and the reasons behind her loyalty. I love how you show the development of her relationship between her and Shepard how they are both blessed and cursed to dance that dance of unrequited sexual tension till death does them part. I love how she the predator has become the prey. How through mercy or perhaps something else entirely she was allowed to know freedom of another sort. To love and be loved back.

I really do hope that you continue to explore this fascinating and so complex character as I think you really hit the nail on the head and I'd love ot read more!

I certainly didn't expect him to pick Morinth. But hey, there is more than one path. You've got Morinths' charm down and her way of thinking is reflected. One reviewer said Morinth had fallen victim to Shepard..would never have thought of that either. I guess i'm too into Para!Shep to enjoy this to it's fullest But the turnabout of how Morinth is ruled by Shepard, the gravity of that is not lost on me, it kinda shakes me. And in that respect, I say Bravo.

I can't really say too much except that I really liked the tone of this story and I think you wrote it pretty well. It's been hard for me to get back into fanfic after a very long hiatus, but I was genuinely interested in reading your fic and even finishing it- so, yey! - haha. No but really, I think it was done fantastically.

Well. this blows my fic "The Game" out of the water. Well done. Love the gradual change as the whole prey/predator dynamic you had going. Hope to see more from you Maybe some Shepard/Tali?

At any rate, I'm Ganja Naraku,

Keep Kicking ass.

Very, very nice. I tip my hat off to you for getting into Morinth's head the way you did, but I can picture this easily happening. I especially liked the seduction scene, the way you wrote how her mind beat against his and failed-nice imagery there.

Ah, you say this is half-baked but I enjoyed it very much! I liked the sort of doomed romance feel and I adored the 'humanization' of Morinth. In my opinion she is really quite a tragic character and I feel you tapped into that quite well.

This is a brilliant reversal. Honestly I never even thought of anything like this - though that's probably because Morinth is written like a cardboard tube with breasts in the game and they could have done so much more with her. More exactly like this. Morinth being the victim of her own nature, sure. But Morinth the victim of Shepard?

I probably can't conceive of it because I always think of Shepard as the ultimate hero - even Renegade Shepard is a hero to me because she does what she does so that others don't have to. Here you portray Shepard as animated from within by a dark willpower - a disturbing concept that I like very much, even if I couldn't play it in my own games.

I have always believed that no matter what kind of character Shepard is, she changes everyone she meets, for better or for worse. She guides Garrus towards or away from the light. She gives Wrex the courage to save his people. She helps Tali complete her passage into adulthood. She helps Miranda come to terms with her existence and shows Jack that maybe the entire galaxy doesn't exist to make her life miserable. Morinth is pretty much the only character in the game who has no experience like this - Morinth is evil, pure and simple, in a universe too complicated to allow real evil to exist. Not to mention that the choice between her and Samara isn't really a choice - it's not a Paragon/Renegade choice, it's a good/evil choice, which doesn't belong in Mass Effect. If Morinth were portrayed as more of a victim I think the relationship could be a lot more interesting.

I love when fanfiction is better than the source material. I also love it when it makes me think like this. Thank you, my good man.

There is only one thing wrong with this-that it is a one-shot! Your description and the way you made Morinth sympathetic, which I found her to be the one time my Shepard chose her instead of Samara, was spot on. I mean, Samara and Morinth are two sides of the same coin, right? Mine was a male ultra Paragon and it was an accident on my part. I hit the wrong side of the choices and got her. Having her with my team was the first time I got through with saving everyone on the team and the entire crew. So, KUDOS to you!

I would have continued the story until either Shepard or Morinth died.

Ending this with a tragedy might have aded a bit more closure to the story.

This is good. Damn good. I've been trying to formulate something like this for my Renegade story for weeks, and never could have pulled it off.

In my own continuity, the one think I had intended/planned different would have been for Renegade Shepard to have taken Morinth's offer, survived, but walked away unsatisfied afterward: the very nature that lets him survive meaning he could not enjoy. He is the one she wants, but who can't offer him anything but power.

Regardless of my own interpretation, this is great. It's balanced, well paced, organized into good pieces, a great touch on exploring a pitifully underdeveloped character's nature. I, personally, am of the opinion that Morinth does value her victims like Nef in her own way, but Renegade Shepard certainly stands out.

Certainly a welcome addition to my favorite's list.