"Jill looks at Mary and tears are gushing like a bubbling volcano from her eyes like two strings of silly putty."

Best line ever! All hail volcanoes!

is there any way you could change the name Jill, cause thats my name, and its sort of strange, sorry, i know, im being selfish

"Pregnancing"?

I think I love you.

I made whoopie and I got pregnant with Jill’s boyfriend’s
baby and it makes me so depressing now.
Can I just say, wow?
starmouse

You write OUTSTANDING trollfics. This one really had me in total stitches. Please PLEASE write some more, it's been more than a year now since you last posted a fic! The Lord of the Rings fandom is just waiting for you and your volcanoes.

repeated names too many times

Learn to write. You use way too many adjectives that don't even make sense and you don't need to say her name every time. Example: "Jill is a gangster girl because Jill has tattoos and piercings and Jill wears baggy jeans,"

Instead use, "Jill is a gangster girl because she has tattoos and piercings and she wears baggy jeans," See how it just flows much better.

And Babymimi does it again. ALL HAIL BABY MIMI!

The Vipress

Dear God(dess): Why do you wish to torture me so, by allowing me to find these pieces of atrocity?

Yeah, this was bad. The bit about the "Lord's Blessing" made me want to retch until my trachea fell out. I think 7th Heaven fanfiction should be banned...

...Well, I think pretty much ALL fanfiction should be banned.

Thats crazy! I have tears in my eyes from laughing so hard!

uh, riiiight

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haha ironic that i'm positioning at a baby mimi story.

This review may not make sense. That's because the gaping holes where my eyes used to be are spilling gore onto my keyboard, even as I weep tears of blood.

It burns.

Oh God it burns.

Im going to go and sit in the corner of a very dark room now, and hug my knees while I rock back and forth and chant the words "Help me mommy the volcano lady hurt me." over and over again.

I don't want to be rude but you rushed the story, the grammer and

punchation is kinda bad and you are telling from first second and third

person, it dosen't make sense. The topic is good, just work on it,

it can be better.

I AGREE WITH YOU TOTALLY. BUT YOU MADE IT SOUND SO EASY. LIKE SHE HAS THE BABY THEN ALL IS OKAY. THAT ISN'T TRUE RAISEING A BABY IS HARD WORK