lol! Date night! El and Neal so cute

This has been a great storie.
I hope for an update soon on this.
JeanneZ84

I feel so very bad for Elizabeth Burke.
JeanneZ84

Oh My I hope they get inthere in time.

JeanneZ84

Peter will get there in time I hope before it gets too bad.

JeanneZ84

Giggle. That was a perfect ending! :) I loved it so much! I was worried... But Neal is a smart one. :) Great job! It was amazing!

What? Ah! That's awful!
I loved the way you had Neal communicate the anklet thing to Elizabeth... It felt very "him."

Ah! No! *gasp* I can't breathe... You had me from "it"... Man!

Nice ending. I can just picture Peter insisting that viewing the football game is a Thanksgiving ritual.

That was a great ending to a fantastic story...I truly enjoyed it and how in the end when Neal stated they were like family...I always see them like that now...not in the beginning of the series but more so as the season went...now go and write another...Sue

yay! i love happy endings! hehe, so glad Neal was smart enough to wear a vest! smart boy Neal.

Love this story cant wait for chapter 4 great cliff hanger. But i have to agree with fotodi i found my self wondering wouldnt he know what Peter looks like?

I like your story and it is interesting to think Elizabth is not who she claims to be.

BUT ...

I cannot get past a few huge logic problems ...

(1) Why didn't Neal grab Peter in the FBI Lobby?

If Elizabeth were in trouble, he would not keep it from Peter unless El asked.

(2) Wouldn't Derek have noticed the hundreds of pictures of Peter & Elizabeth

which adorn their home? (Stairwell wall has at least 4 large photographs).

Since Derek was waiting inside the Burke home for Elizabeth to return, he

would assuredly have studied his rival's image - curiosity? Jealousy? Rage?

Though Neal was surprised and covered in a head bag, Derek still thought Neal

was Peter after unmasking him in the Warehouse. Hello? Unless Derek is

totally insane this is a plot logic bomb.

(3) Since we know Peter Burke had Elizabeth tailed by the FBI before they dated,

do not assume he wouldn't have run a background check on her.

So, Peter must know she was Deborah, yes?

u know I love this story but I don't think Peter would stay around and plan meetings when he knew the location of El and Neal. That's the only part that felt out of place, the rest is great. I can't wait to see what happened with El and Neal, hope the idiot doesn't hurt her since I like her better as a mother Han towards Neal rather than being hurt herself.

Yeah. Another one. Whoo! This one looks good. I admit I was looking for a Neal focused whumpage but this works. I like giving El a back story.