Happy magical Akuroku moment! The world is happy now!

I love kid Vexen! Absolutely adore him! Kid Marluxia should come in soon, and then can be little kiddy romance!

And Axel and his magic handcuffs... Roxy should have let him 'finish'

Vithian

Okay, I think I'll review Fire here as well, since you'll probally read this and probally not if I put it on your Fire story. Anyway, i'll review both stories here.

Fire Review:

Okay, so I loved Fire. I'll point out stuff you could work on, then I'll tell you what I liked and didn't like.

Okay, so first, the spelling. I shouldn't judge you on that because I'm not great at spelling. Also, there were times when you left out words, but I understood the story still, so that's fine. Um... Also, there are some voids in the story. Places where you could just fill in with useless detail to make it longer. But, even with all that, I still love the story. A lot.

I love Axel's fire problem and how Roxas isn't afraid. I laughed so hard when Demyx went " DANCE, WATER, DANCE!" I litterally fell on the floor laughing! Your story was susspenseful(sp?)! I wanted to scream with excitement at every twist and turn. I cried when Vexen and Marluxia died. I never thought of them as a couple until this story. I hated that Xion died. But, hey. She did it to save Roxas. I love that Roxas won't die, but I find it sad that he won't be with Axel [ I guess that's all for Fire. Moving on...

Heal Review:

I guess just spelling and the void thing. But, still brillant.

Um... Not much to say yet, but please, talk to me if you need any ideas. I think that at some point they should meet Luxord. At least once! Please?

I love both of your stories! Keep on writing!

- J

Zexion: HEEEEEELLLOOOOOOOOOO? IS ANYONE HERE? Damn, I'm alone. Not even Vithian's here... Probably a good thing, she'd try and kill me...

I can't believe Demyx thought I had found Vexen's corpse and brought it to my house! I mean, ugh! Disgusting, vile, etc etc... Then he accuses me of stealing a child? Demyx isn't that slow... -thinks for a moment- Okay, maybe he is, but still! And how could you change my beliefs like that? Okay, maybe it was necessary for the story, but I...

I'm not sure what I'm talking about anymore. Anyway! I like how you do this from my perspective, a nice change!

I don't DO cookies...

Zexion

Vithian: It's VEXEN! -dies of fangirlism-

Xigbar: Damn it! I can't do this again! -lets Vexen out of cage- Alright, listen here! You get your freedom as long as you do this review thingy, got it?

Vexen: Why is there a dead body next to me?

Xigbar: No idea! See ya!

Vexen: ... Hi? Okay, well, it's a little weird for me to be writing this when not only am I supposed to be dead, but now I'm alive as a five year old, no less, so I'm kind of freaked out. But, anyway, glad I'm in the story again, kind of. Last time I was in it, you had me killed so...

I'm going to leave it here, since I'm not even sure what I'm supposed to be doing, and this dead person here is freaking me out...

Vexen

Nooo! It's the evil filler chapter! -dies dramaticly-

Xigbar: -pokes with stick- Okay then, I'll just tell Nalyx how awesome her story is then...

I don't really know what to say, I mean, Vithian locked all the other Organization members in a cage with Tidus (poor suckers) so there is no one for me to argue with or scare...

...

...

I'm bored. This is boring. I don't know how that crazy little fangirl can review these stories, it's pretty boring. I have absolutely no idea what to say. Your story's good? Your a great author? All are true but they sound pretty weak... Oh well! It'll have to do!

I don't give out cookies or cakes or any of that shit. I'm the one forced to make them, so I'm keeping them

Xigbar

Vithian: Axel you sly dog...

Axel: What? What did I do?

Roxas: Seduced me, that's what

Axel: Oh come on, you enjoyed every minute of it...

Vithian: Hold it right there! -runs into kitchen- The popcorn is just heating up, okay? Just give me a minute... There! -runs back out with popcorn- Okay! Please, continue

Roxas: This is kinda weird...

Vithian: I'm going to stop it there, then, when I get to the last chapter you have posted, I'll give you a nice big review!

Here's some... I don't know really, I found it in Vexen's room.

Vithian

Gah! I just realised that your not on author alert! -quickly hits Author (Alert) button! I'M SORRY!

I'm glad I can inspire you! -feels special- It's a good start (though a little confusing...) I can't wait to see what happens! And I'm using to many exclamation marks!

Xigbar: Tell me about it...

Vithian: Quiet you!

Xigbar: See? There you go again! And again! And again! And-

Vithian: Shut up!

Xigbar: ...

Vithian: ...

Xigbar: And again

Vithian: -throws cake in face-

Xaldin: My cake!

Vithian: No! I am not hosting some gigantic Organization XIII party again! NO WAY!

Sora: PARTY OVER HERE!

Vithian: -glare- I'm going to talk to Nalyx because you guys are the most annoying people/nobodies on the face of the Earth!

Demyx: Why thank you!

Vithian: Ok, anyway, I'm going to be nice and review every chapter of this! Yay!

And have some of Xaldin's souffle, since I'm out of cookie dough (Damn Xigbar, eats my cookie dough)

Vithian

YAY!

another chapter! thats awesome. aww. i can imagine a little cute vexen. unlike his older self *shivers*

Good chapter!

Alicia Chan

yay! you finally wrote!

anyway

did vexen come back? what of marluxia?

OHMYGEEYOUNGERVEXEN?

*le gasp*

Does that mean there's a younger Marluxia if there's a younger Vexen?

Soooo many questions...

Update soon!

awesome,babydoll

ack! soooo dramatic! i can't take it! lolol jk

Aww! You did an Axel PoV! That's great! :D

I thought it was funny how Roxas could be so nonchalant about scaring Axel half to death.

AWWWWWW!