Um...you spelled "veal" wrong at the end and confused me a bit.

Omg I love your syntax! Reverse grammar is so Shakespearean and so amazing (and might I add, FUN) to write in, but for me it's difficult to keep up such a steady, fluent tempo and syllable construction, so I'm really in awe of your skills as a poet!

And you capture the emotions and psychology of Suzaku and Lelouch really very well...hehehe...-dark grin-

I give this a 10/10!