I have 1 small complaint the only 1 possible to make is you put the wrong kind of 'here' you put here as in listen. Otherwise I think this should be used as an epilogue for the book :D

This is a really good beginning because it makes the reader think and ask themselves questions. Great start.

A nice start, looks like its going to be an interesting storey to read.
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I think this is very creative and you should continue writing but it think that you have not linked this to the story very well by the beloved micheal morpergo ! i hope you take this inacount x x x