Good plot and execution. I think it's nice that people show a kinder side to the prince. Good luck with the story...and with the finals. Don't worry. they're usually not that hard, though i'll keep my fingers crossed for you. Good luck.
i gotta say, i am hooked by the plot. a good representation of Prince Nuada, character and scene description, love/hate tension, although I am a little peeved by the story layout. it looks blocky. a conversation of two or more characters needs to be divided in paragraphs. example:
He smiled at her, "You are an interesting case, human-,"
"Rowan," she corrected.
"Rowan," he started, "I will be seeing you again," and then was embraced by the shadows as he walked back out of the light, Rowan tried to follow him, but saw no trace of him, she gave a crooked grin.
I think you got some work ahead of you. I think you need to rewrite the whole lot. And start from the beginning.
Break down your chapters. There should be spaces every time a person speaks.
Is this fic happening in present day? If so, Rowan wouldn't be speaking in proper English. She would probably talk with a bit of slang; colloquial speak. For example, this - "My apologies, I was just wishing to see my savior's face, so that I may thank him fully."
Not only that, it doesn't seem feasible to me that she would be so trusting of Nuada just in the few seconds of meeting him. Do you honestly think she would be kissing him?
I'm sorry if this is harsh, but I'm trying to be as constructive as possible. The only way to tell if anything needs improvement is to trust reviewers who are looking out for your best interest.
Try looking at other fanfics out there that have many, many reviews. See what makes a good fic. And with that, see how you can improve.
i like it, some people will tell you it's moving fast but you never really know what elven relationships are like, they might develope quickly. i think it works, eventually you might want to explore why Nuada is suddenly attracted to this one human but other than that it's great. hope you update soon!
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