 runaround 2/10/02 . chapter 1 A alright story with a good idea behind it. I have two major points of advice. Daria, being the writer she is, would have probably written longer, more detailed diary entries, even at a younger age. You might want to go rephrase those, add some detail. My other advice: change the ending. Throughout the story you built up to what should be a good ending, then just kind of chopped it off. Be creative! Other than that, pretty good. |