I like this story, at least the plot and characterizations. I like that James was able to make a gesture of peace to Snape, and I like that Snape threatened ghastly torture to anyone who thanked him or ever told the horrendous secret that he'd done something decent. The trial (not trail) was a farce, but that seems to be par for the course in the wizarding world. The Dursley solution was not the best, but they did get some payback. (I'd have preferred public humiliation rather than private.) James was surprisingly well-behaved and in control after seeing how Harry lived. (I think that's a good thing.)

But the diction is bad. Often I'm not sure what you intended to say, especially when you would miss a "not" or "don't" or make two or three errors in a single sentence. What's especially sad is you have author notes saying it was edited and 'beta'ed, so supposedly it was even worse to start with.

It was tolerable enough overall that I can give it 3.5 stars out of 5, but I can't add it to my favorites.

It would be really nice if you would learn to spell trial when you're writing about one, and not confuse it with a trail, which is a very different concept altogether.

I also don't like it when you spell awkward as acquired, sake as sack, sore as soar and similar atrocities.

I would have stopped reading long ago if the mayhem and madness were not so delightful.

I'm finding the plot to be intriguing, but the diction is very annoying. Almost every paragraph has at least one error, often two or three, and this detracts greatly from the story. There is also entirely too much notes and stuff before each chapter.

You say you've reedited this but it still has an annoying number of distracting spelling, word misuse, and syntax errors. In some cases it makes the meaning obscure enough I don't know what you meant to say. Be sure to correct all the "where"s that are supposed to be "were" and "we're"; that's very annoying.

The plot is intriguing; the story holds a lot of promise so far.

i think it would totally rock if HP and HG got together...

another idea for a story is that Lily is still alive...really bring back the whole Snape thing, wouldnt it?

About promising to sing that "Little Hero" lullaby to your

kids if you ever have any, I understand completely.

There is a Harry Potter FanFic named "Lily's Lullaby".

The Author's name is "FacetiousFish".

The lullaby is one which Lily sang to baby Harry,

which he is now remembering as Voldemort is attacking his parents. I thought that the lullaby was just so sweet,

so I wrote it down and saved it on my laptop so I would

be able to sing it to my kids if I ever have any.

P.S. I'd suggest you read the "Lily's Lullaby" FanFic.

P.P.S. The complete lyrics to Lily's Lullaby is at the end

of the FanFic(if you know what I mean).

You can't do this to me! You can't write sentimental chapters that make me feel all warm and mushy and sentimental! It just makes me want to keep reading! But it's way to late, and I can't! It's torture!

It's gaped...not gapped...

this was a very very very good story!

i absolutly loved!

one of the best fanfics ive read... u know what would b awesome? a sequel! because how it ended it would look very possable... soooo...mabye?

new and unique concept. I had read your 1st chapter and its good.

I am wondering what will happen next? now i am going to read the second chap

I know the last time you touched this story was years ago, but I just had to review. Really, really amazing story. It kept me entertained for days.

:)

Just have to comment that this is my favorite chapter- the Marauders together again. I've read several "James is alive!" stories, but I think you portray their reactions the best. Some people just skip over the shock and joy of seeing their dead best friend, but you wrote it well. Thank you :)

All I can say is this is amazing. Great story, and much more convincing than other fics where James and/or Lily are alive when everyone else thought they were dead. Great job, fave

Goose-chan

So sad! They needed Harry there to fight off the Dementors! Can you imagine the power of his Patronus now? I mean 100 Dementors before and he killed them not just drove them off but destroyed them! :) With this as his memory the Dementors don't stand a chance.! :) Good that the Weasleys are ok. James almost took out Charlie Weasley and company. Oops.