|Reviews for Crossguard|
| Guest 7/27/12 . chapter 1
I don't blame you in the slightest. FFnet is now fFUCKitALLnet as far as I'm concerned. They have gone to hell with this newly added bullshit.
I wish you all the best and thanks for the heads up. :D
I'll try to remember to check your account occasionally. :)
| Strunk White 7/20/12 . chapter 1
Dude...I try to send a positive review to chapter two and discover I can't and chapter three doesn't exist anymore. Wowza. Go away to eat dinner and things change. Pbbbbbbt.
| Strunk White 7/20/12 . chapter 1
Hmm. I like a lot of what you did, and the idea of sending Cloud back *that far* is a good new twist. But there's a certain lack of attention to detail that bugged me the whole time I was reading. Specifying 'low level fire spell' and then saying Cloud was distracted by it with his proven record of working through things like impalement seemed off. Stating that he killed 'a monster' without specifying the kind is as ridiculous and as bad for immersion as if you were writing a story about an Amerindian and had him kill 'an animal' and bring it home, without bothering to specify if it was a deer or a rabbit or a freaking wolverine.
Speaking of which, 'God' is a weird imprecation for someone from Gaia, which seems thin in religion besides the old earth-worship and certainly doesn't have any such nameless patriarchal deities. More loss of immersion.
But honestly, apart from the 'a monster' piece of vagueness, I think all this lack of attention to detail bothers me as much as it does because I don't like the way you construct sentences, (with dangling modifiers and no commas where I think commas exceedingly necessary, and matching the wrong prepositions with various verbs, and no sense of rhythm whatsoever) and therefore reading your story was like a continuous unpleasant sensation, like sitting on a chair with a spring sticking out of the upholstery into oneself. Which makes me sad, because the conceptual part of your writing, despite occasional fuzziness, is good enough that I want to find out what happens next. But I'm going to be twitching and frustrated and have to very consciously stop myself from writing an angry review telling you you fail at life. Which would be unfair and probably hurtful.
The description of the originalness of the town was pretty good, and I did quite enjoy your choices vis a vis folding game mechanics into the universe as experienced by Cloud. :) Getting Tifa a potion from a monster drop to help with the fall damage. Hee! His mom having a 'spiky ponytail' was nice.
I'm going to try to read the next chapter, hoping I can either learn to ignore the stuff I don't like or that the style gets more elegant.
| Guest 7/3/12 . chapter 5
I liked the aspect that she sent him back with a materia that would, theoretically speaking, be able to help stop Jenova on her poisoning level. Maybe help with the degeneration of Genesis and Angeal? Or that may not be along the possibilities of Cloud's thinking but it is mine I look forward to reading more about this interesting Cloud, his upcoming experiences in Niblehiem and the eventual move to Midgar...Vivian is awesome, btw, I like her character and how you write her.
I hope you are able to find inspiration for this interesting plot line as I find it enjoyable and interesting to read!
| matchynishi 7/4/12 . chapter 5
A new take on the time-travel - I liked it! :) Looking forward to more.
| Everfew 4/24/12 . chapter 5
Huh... hope you'll update soon.
| Kairi.1101 4/11/12 . chapter 5
This is really good! I like that you're using the time travel element, but not making it the sole focus of the story. It's there, it lends a helping hand, and it enhances the story. Can't wait to read more!
| wolfawaken 4/9/12 . chapter 5
I do hope you will be writing more. I had enjoy each chapter you have written.
| HikariNoTenshi-San 4/5/12 . chapter 5
Update this story. NOW...Please? xD OMG, Mini-Cloud is so cute! I kinda want a chocobo to appear out of nowhere and become Cloud's "noble steed" or something. Or a Nibel Wolf. Or a Nebel Dragon. Whatever works. xP UPDATE SOON PLEASE!
| Janneia 4/1/12 . chapter 5
Like it? I think I love it! The pace is rather refreshing, too. Cloud can *afford* to go slow; there's no rush. He can take the time to enjoy things... like you've written earlier. He's taking the time to re-orientate himself with the world and he's not pushing himself, but rather appreciating all that he's forgotten the first time around. And looking at everything from a different perspective. It's rather nice! Not to say that I don't like other timetravel fics but yours is different and the writing's excellent, btw! I can't wait to see what you'll write next. Also am rather curious about Mama Strife's backstory *LOVE*
| Dogmatix 3/20/12 . chapter 5
Like it? I love it! :D
| Wrin 3/20/12 . chapter 5
Are you planning to add to this? It's pretty cool, and I've been looking for more FFVII fanfiction either way. I am a bit apprehensive that it might turn into yaoi, though...
| Yamon 3/15/12 . chapter 5
The story sounds good so far.
I cannot really imagine adult Cloud playing like a child but you made clear that he is more indulging the other children, than playing...
I hope you have not given up on this yet!
| Ganhiwa 3/9/12 . chapter 5
Love this, I hope you will update soon. Was stuck with my nose at the screen all the way through
| Rin Hitokiri 2/28/12 . chapter 5
I really really REALLY hope that you decide to update soon!