|Reviews for Love In Desperation? Chapter One|
| LauranTheBiscotti 9/7/10 . chapter 1
WOw, love with Mary and Collie...never saw that coming !
PLEASE UPDATE SOON !
| Tenukii 7/30/10 . chapter 1
Quite an odd take on the story... I like the idea of Tak being able to feel love, but this feels kind of rushed. You might want to try taking your time building up the story rather than hurrying through it. Also, you need to work on your grammar and spelling; you tend to use the wrong homophones (words that sound alike): whale instead of wail, flower instead of flour, etc.
This has potential though! An editor or beta reader might be able to help you with it.