I can smell it getting better. Which sounds slightly creepy. Oh, Raven needs a pimp slap of justice to be smack against her cheek.

Revenge... this is amazing. Thank you, god bless your evil genius soul.

OH THE REVENGE! OH YESSS. *random outburst*

This was so sad. Just - it was so ... words cannot describe how deep it was. I connected with it.

So interesting... it was very sad but I loved it. It gave the good kind of chills

This made me very sad, about what happened to Emery and Roxas in here. Namine... I will never think about her the same way again.

I looked at Emery on the link and he is attractive. I see nothing wrong, damnit. I hate Namine and the foolish servants who will believe anything.

Oh no, the ending is such a cliffhanger. I laughed when Axel told Roxas that he made a dish out of Namine. Too bad she died, it's a shame.

I really don't see any grammatical mistakes. But hey - I'm here to read not be rude. Thank you for the awesome chapter. I hope Namine doesn't die, it wouldn't be fun if her suffering ended. Dr. Vexen... I loved how the plot is going. Good job and keep it up!

Rather fluffly indeed. Namine cut up her bed cause she was piissssseeddd. HAHA.

So sweet. Oh god, it was so sweet. You just might be my inspiration.

Yessssss, Namine got what she deserved. I think I've been misspelling her name for awhile. Thank you for the beautiful chapter.

So dark and alluring. Mhmm, I enjoyed it. Very upsetting how rude Namine is. I hope she gets a fork stuck through both of her palms and her hair burned. But that wouldn't happen, sadly.

Roxas... did that to his gential. Ouch, I can almost feel the pain. But hey - I'd do that to if I were in his shoes. This chapter was very bitter-sweet. Thank you.

So interesting and it's luring me in slowly. I am in love with this fanfiction. Past lovers? Ouch, poor Roxas. And Namine as a mean slut? That's comedy gold, I love the change-up of her being preppy and a sweet innocent girl in most fanfictions that include her.