i think you should rethink youre writing style but good story line i look forward to a good fight scene but PLEASE dont make this a romance where eric falls in love with belle PLEASE!

Weak

Is this going to be a Eric and Bella story?

What? I can't even read this! Seriously, dialouge goes in quotes

"Bella! Something's wrong!" Alice cried out.

This story had fantastic potential, but I can't read it.

Ok, I told my self not to but I read this and I think that It's bad. You're not even trying. I sounds like a five year old sribbled it down in his free time. I Love the Crow, but I Hate twilight(notice how I didn't capitolize twilight on account of that it doesn't deserve to be. You have raped my favorite classic. May god have mercy on your soul. haha But seriously you fucked up.

it good

cause i love the crow