i just readed this all over again and i still love this story... what will happen in Act 2 now that Usagi is a youma? oh please continue please please...

cool chapter

continue!

it's amazing, please continue!

oh please continue i want to see what happens to kunzite and usagi

come on continue please!

okay it was a good story but usagi has blonde hair and blue eyes...just so you know.

PLEASE CONTINUE! I WANT TO KNOW WHAT WILL HAPPEN NEXT!PLEASE CONTINUE!

so Usagi or should I say Ōkami is kinda like inuyasha with the white hair, the ears and the fangs but very evil and femaleness and very beautiful? I have to say I like it. keep going. I love this Act 14, I always wonder what happens with Usagi if she turns to a youma without the senshi and Ami helping her turning back to normal. love it.

more more more and a little more of Kunzite and Usagi together please. keep going I like it...

Poor Usagi T_T At least she looks good in her new outfit... Will she be okay?

Well, there's the fact that he's studying medicine and spends a lot of time at the hospital. Imagine yourself running out of your job all the time - it's not that simple and even might get you sacked.

I think Mamoru's strongest setback is that he really doesn't know who he is at that point in the story. This makes him weak and insecure. He doesn't know his full potential yet, and he's sort of aimless, trying to protect Usagi/Sailor Moon, but not really understanding why he's gotten himself into that mess, even angering Hina's father who has practically raised him.

Well, in any case, here's what went through my mind when reading this chapter. It's just my thoughts and not meant to criticize, so please ignore it if it doesn't suit you. :)

About the story itself, it's a bit difficult to follow who thinks what, and in whose head we are exactly at any given point of the story. It would be great if the characters would actually be persons, rather than just feeling like one large thought process you have... I hope that makes sense. :)

Thinking thoughts from a character's perspective is fine, but you need to think in the charater's voice and from the character's point of view. For example, the way you portray Mamoru's thoughts reflect a lot of how you think about him, but not that much about what the character really would think in that situation. :)

Looking forward to more!

It may be my emotional nature, or your brilliant description, idk, or may be both, but I cried at the depiction of Ami-chan's thought.

This piece was very moving and I enjoyed your idea. It would be fun to see Kunzite's attempts on "collecting the whole set" of senshi as he expressed.

I look forward to the next chapter.

Thank you & all the best.

Interesting idea, I really wanna see where you go with it. I love an evil!Usagi...

Thanks for sharing.

xoxoPAUxoxo

Honestlly I'd completley forgoten about that conversation on youtube, and had kinda moved on. But I gave it a shot, after not reading Sailor Moon fanfics in about a year, and I have to say I like it alot. _ An good person turned evil pure awesomness. I actually hope you explore what Kunzite said about having all of them as evil...