Wow nice story, I like how it goes, glad the System Alliance doesn't seem to follow all the Citadel rules. Just a good question, How the heck does the Forerunners fit into all of this? I only heard a few glands of info so maybe you could do a codex entree on them

I must say I'm rather enjoying this story though I'm curious about the Spartan IVs from what I've been able to gather from the reading so far they seem like upgraded version of the ORION Projects candidates than on par with Spartan IIs or IIIs. That being said is the training method similar or have they been humanized due to public knowledge of the program, does the public even know what the IIs and IIIs went through to become what they are?

Then their is the matter of Shepard's height 5.5' if I recall right, when did she receive he augmentations? The IIs underwent them around 14 years old while IIIs where between 10 and 14. Right at the beginning of adolescence when the body is developing IIs averaged around seven feet tall while IIIs around 6.6'. Which make me wounder was Shepard in her late teens when she had the procedures? Which makes be wounder was she kidnapped by ONI or did she enlist age the legal age of 18? If this was the case it would explain a lot given her personality and openess compared to the Spartans of old.

Great chapter. I was looking forward to the next one and you delivered!

Please don't have this degenerate into another story of "my personal Shepard" leading the team. Enough of those have been done and none of them well.

Yours has the potential and the ingredients already set for a very different story.

As long as you make sure that all the people speak realistically. Nothing stops a decent/good story as fast as poorly worded conversation. It quickly leads to Bad Things(TM)

Great story, love how the two worlds have been blended. Can't wait to read more.

I hate Kai Leng more than ever now after what he did in here. Poor Tombs.

I think he's more silent in the book but he was in character.

Nice.

Good chapter.

Good stuff. You've mixed the Halo and Mass Effect universes very well. The only way this could get better would be if Shepard found the remains of the FUD floating about somewhere.

please continue with the story

Though I don't normally review stories that I have a hand in, this is a special case as the part with the council is the part I have no hand in and the part I want to praise. This is unique among most Mass Effect stories, crossover or not. The game and the fics are too often black and white and does little credit to the concept of diplomacy among states. The realpolitik approach of both sides is quite Bismarckian. Very good work here.

Good to have you back man. The update was great.

I think you forgot to mention the Hedgehog's ability to be deployed from high altitude.

Also in the game Therum is a human colony.

And the fact that thermal clips weren't produced till ME2. It was an adaptation learned from the Geth.

Like the chances to some of the characters. It matches standings in the galactic field.

Hope you update your other works soon.

Really like this story, so hope to see it continued. Very interesting and well done meshing of two of my favorite game franchises. Hope to see an update soon. :)

-dajohu

Above excellent job I like.

Glad to see the alliance helping the Quarian's, and the Council being suck ups, after all the bad things they did to their people.

You are doing good. you have 35 reviews already. Only thing is that (according to Oh So Important Canon) Spartans were loners. even ones who socialized a lot kinda have to be. in battle you don't want people with relatively slow reflexes and poor skills (such as a normal human)to watch your back when you go into YOUR area of combat.

Like the way you turn the game story into something a bit more dynamic, more realistic - for example, I never got the whole point of gathering a team of six if you always leave half of them behind. The whole Quarian/Humanity interaction was nicely done as well - perhaps you should add them milking the balance for all its worth; reminds me of the politics here in Sweden; Seven major parties, divided in two almost perfectly balanced blocks with the green environmental party playing them both for as many concessions as they can get.

Do update, looks good so far.