D: that was a terribly suspenseful cliff hanger, very well used. I dearly hope you update soon since it has been almost three months since your last update, and judging by your authors notes that's about the time span in between your updates. This story is very interest grabbing and I like it quite a bit.

NOOOOOOO! HOW CAN YOU LEAVE US WITH A CLIFFIE SUCH AS THIS?! WHAT LEVEL OF EVIL ARE YOU?!
Lol, though. Love the story. Seriously. 'Tis an amazing AU. Like, the coolest one I've found so far. But you gotta hurry with the next update! You're killing us! D:

I really like your fic, please continue when you can

whens the next chapter?

Are you serious!? Please tell me you're updating this soon! Dude! I was getting all into the story( I've been reading this fic for two days straight) the building tension of Zen not having a flame was giving me weird heart palpitations... and then you leave us a cliffhanger on the most intense moment of the story! I read all your notes about how you don't update for long periods of time... It's killing me! D: I'm so anxious to know what happens next! •
Bacon

OhmygodthisstoryissoawesomeY OUNEEDTOUPDATENOW

Love it! Can't wait for next chapter!

This story, I love it. I'm not really good with my words so that's all I can say that will make sence... I can't wait for the next up date!

Oh my gosh, what's gonna happen next? SETOOOO, NOOOOO! Gah, such a cliffhanger, but I love it anyways! Can't wait to see what happens next :DDDD Seriously...

OWOWOW
THAT CLIFF HANGER-
Please update, I'M BEGGING YOU OMQ.
THIS IS TOO GOOD.

THEYJIEYTDRGFTHNBRGT
HURRY AND UPDATE

"I warned you about the stairs…" Seto started.

DO I SEE A HOMESTUCK REFERENCE ()

okay lets be serious now also this is going to be a long review uwu

This is a really great fic! Like, wow, everything is so well-thought: the story's plot, the plot for every arc and the details; everything just made me speechless.

However! Judging by your author's notes, you seem to update really slowly. I'm a little disappointed by that, and will not be surprised if the followers of this fanfic dropped this for having really slow updates.

But that's all right, I suppose. Every wait is definitely worth it!

Now, time for the actual review.

This story has a lot of grammatical errors you should keep a close eye to. Although you got yourself a beta reader, there are still a lot of things that gets missed. For instance, run-on sentences. That's actually the main problem here, and you really, REALLY need to fix that. Sorry if I sound mean or whatever, but you really need to fix that. Being a-sort-of-grammar-nazi that I am, I find it hard to enjoy this fic with me finding those.

There were dangling modifiers too, and misplaced apostrophes in contractions.

To summarise (and also put the stuff I didn't put in the earlier paragraphs), if I am too rate this, it's probably gonna be a 7.5/10. You write the characters so well, and your OCs fit well into the story, much to my relief. Usually, when authors insert their OCs, they're very out of place and usually they're Mary Sues and Gary Stus. Then the details of each chapter and plot are well-thought. However, the grammar in the fanfic urked me so much; I wasn't able to enjoy this fanfic like I normally would.

I hope to see more of this! *heart*

Its ok! Just try to update again XD

My only reaction at the end of the chapter:

SCREEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA ACHHHHHH!

Now you may think it had to do with being worried for Seto-admittedly it was a lil bit, but it was more over that Shin has finally shown up. Holy hell Sleepy, I never want this story to end. You're writing is so casual and easy to read. A good level of vocabulary and the whole story is always a trip with every chapter. I enjoy your work endlessly, best way to relax ever.

Eagerly, I await your next instalment.

Stay strong,
Kasstle

Yay new chapter That ending though! Ugh I cant wait now! Poor Seto, I wonder how Crow will react. XD