Just re-read this...i had forgotten that last line. Good stuff. Now the only question is...who exactly is Ranma's Father? =D Something for the imagination I suppose.

Tis a great story. The summary doesn't even compare to the total story. Great plot the whole way through. Adding the Dragonball Z was unexpected but tied in nicely. You even hinted towards a reason like that with the whole 'other reason Nodoka adopted Ranma,' so it wasn't one of those 'oh yah, and he was a super sayajin that was stronger than everyone else.' My only problem with the story is your times. Like when Saffron was embarrassed for a minute before Hinako laughed at him for a minute. Or when they sat in silence for an hour before speaking. That kind of thing doesn't happen, not even in filler anime.

All in all, a great story.

-DT Sub

You may find this hard to believe, but (cannon) Ranma is not only about fighting, and Ranma fanfics have merit even if they lack battles. Personal development and interpersonal relationships are important too.

Too many people think Takahashi's Ranma stories are an action/romance epic, but if you look closely at the manga you'll realize that they are intended as a comedy - Ranma manga are a parody/caricature of an action/romance story and not to ba taken seriously/literally.

"The frown didn't have much of an effect since she was smiling widely." - strains credibility - smiles and frowns are antithetical.

This seems to be a different (original) kind of story, off to a good start. You captured my attention in the first few paragraphs, and avoided the "everybody gangs up on Ranma at the same time" trope that I despise so much.

The writing is very good, but there are a few homonym errors (e.g.:'break' for 'brake') that keep it from reaching professional/publishable quality.

I'm looking forward to reading the res.
Mike

I Love The Story!!

Hmm... touching a lil.

Wow, and I do mean wow. This is both an amusing commedy and an action packed thriller. To start I was enjoying the change in Ranma and his new family and slowly action and a new enemy were introduced and then it became a thrilling exciting tale of revenge, power and love. A fight between the old and the old/new, very entertaining.

This story has almost everything, I think I missed seeing the kitchen sink. This is a Kungfu movie of the old school at its best.

Please keep writing such great stories.

Great job. It is rare to find Ranma/SM crossover that is actually:
- original (how many more sailors sun or terra i'm going to see?)
- good written. Your style leaves nothing to complain about
- long. I love stories that can entertain me for whole day
- complete
Great plot too. All those twists and turns left me wondering what is going to happen next until last chapter. I do hope to read more of your stories.

This is an excellent story. It was written in such a way, and with such a good idea, that if somebody had enough money to get this proffesionally animated, and pay for the use of characters, and pay for rights to the story, they would. I loved it and wish I could write as well.

Well, as you said in your notes, it is quite a breath of fresh air to see a fic where Ranma is the adopted cousin of Beryl. And the lover of Pluto, on top.

amazing, extremely amazing

Hey your chapter 3,4, & 6 won't come up it's saying the error not found crap. Just thought you should know

i don't understand why you don't have 500 more reviews. This is as much an epic story as some of the other Ranma/Sailor moon classics. I'm glad I took a leap of faith and read it even though it had so few reviews. I'm glad to be occasionally surprized by yet another story that somehow didn't hit it off with reviewers even though it quite obviously deserves alot more credit.

This is a pretty good story. It seems pretty unbalanced with the super powerful 'Nova' family bossing around, but it kinda works out even though all the minions like Ranmas students and the Musk/Phoenix seemed a bit unneccessary.

You say you had the ending planned out though... It seems so funny however - "Ranma gets killed, but Beryl wakes up to heal him and he goes SSJ123!! Kickass all over place! Ranma shacks up with girl. End." I don't think we saw this one coming to be honest.