That was really powerful, I was totally engrosed

You've captured that fear of loosing someone, that agony of watching a teammate fall, pain, blood...everything, just right. I can see everything and feel many things, which is always good in a piece of short fic. It's always a joy to read anything you write with Team Gai. Thanks for sharing!

Great story. I love how you've shown the strength of their bonds through their actions - Team Gai is awesome!

Wow, what a story! Everything was so tense and dramatic and I absolutely loved how Tenten was characterized by trying and succeeding to help Lee. It was really touching how she let him hit her; you know for a fact that he'll deeply regret it later but the fact that she did it in the first place in order to save him... I loved that little bit.

That is hot.

From the moment I read the first sentence, I was hooked into their world. The words were so fluid and engaging that I couldn't tear my eyes from it. I can hardly some it up into words. Best oneshot ever.

Scarringly beautiful. Thank you!

How do you do it? The emotions, the scenes, the descriptions, you know how to transport a reader into a whole new world. Great job!

This is so, so beautiful. Don't stop writing fanfics, please.

That was superb. Well crafted and great characterization. You captured the difficulties of war brilliantly! Well done :).

i love the story especially the ending. yorue a brilliant writer. you should write a novel. id buy it

I love all your team Gai fic and this is no 's protectiveness over her teammates in this fic is really I'm so relieved that Neji made it back to her in one piece in the end.

Were you inspired by charice? she had a song called breathe you out and you know your summary...

Sounds like a nasty situation. It seems like they'll survive the night, but it's more dubious after that.

I thought I was going to faint-that was one seriously hardcore, super intense in it is just so...perfect, the words just flow, the image you paint is so vivid, the raw feeling youre able to convey...and those lines that leaves one breathless

"It's me," he says, and there's an inflection there, a tone that says you know me, all of me, every breath.

Youre always gonna be the best Naruto fanfic writer to me. Thanks for sharing, that was such a treat to read.

beautiful

I really like the different angle you took in this one shot, and how its short yet concise and descriptive.

having schindler's list main theme playing in the background really brought the mood out :]

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