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| Flame Tigress 2003-01-10 ch 1,  | abuseWell, not bad, as invented characters go. She has a personality, and not an insufferable one. I might actually like her. The little box at the bottom of the review window is telling me to "use this opportunity to comment on an aspect of the story that can be improved," so I'll say now that "hands on her hips, arms akimbo" is redundant. Also, is this mostly movie-based? Anyhow, off to read the sequel... |
| Sunsong 2003-01-08 ch 1, | abuseThis looks like it's going to be fun! Please try and keep it from getting Mary-Sueish. |
| C-Bear 2002-09-02 ch 1, | abuseSounds like a good asdventure so far! |
| Thalia Weaver 2002-05-31 ch 1, | abuseWow! This is great! Please, please continue this! I really like Clover; she's a good character, and I admire her spunk. I want to know what happens to her! ;-P -Thalia, Who Really, Really, Really Likes GreyLady's Fic P.S.: Entling Chap 6! |
| Tyra 2002-02-18 ch 1, anon. | abuseIt was very good! The writing was great and very much the way Tolkien wrote out hobbits. Going after Frodo, indeed!lmao. |
| Sun Queen 2002-02-17 ch 1, anon. | abuseInteresting stuff, Bast. I wasn't thinking of including hobbits in my story, but it might be cool to put Clover in a few chapters down the road. My next chapter will be up until Jaidru leaves Gondor, then she'll meet Selka in chapter 4. I'm pretty sure I'll be introducing Kharapel right after that. They're such interesting characters that I want to put them in asap. I'll want to get back to you as soon as I develop my storyline a little more, so the plots can coincide. Let me know if you think of a way to introduce Clover! |
| RachStonebreakr 2002-02-12 ch 1, anon. | abuseCute enough for me to read more if you write it. |