This was so sweet! I would have loved to have seen Edward's & Bella's journey through senior year. I'm sure they had lots of ups and downs and it would have made an excellent chapter story. It might be something to think about after you finish "Crazy Beautiful". Great job Darlin'! XOXO

This was your first ever Edward and Bella ff? Crikey. That's just amazing. I liked it alot. What I also liked was the way you conveyed the essentials of the story instead of going into lots of extraneous detail. I also like your jump-forward. Very nicely done. Thanks for sharing this story.

Udo

wow Gen... that was great!

what a quirky cute little fic!

nice job... I like that Bella was in the kitchen listening to Edward's rant... (pmsl)

I can imagine them sharing a room got REAL cosy!

sweet!

I loved this! I wish it could be a full-length story...but I guess we'll just have to make up our own versions of what led them to graduation day. But I did enjoy it!

This is good!

I don't usually go for third person narratives but I loved this one!

I loved this! I seriously think you could develop this into a multi chapter fic. The first night Bella and Edward shared the room, the sexual tension, the movie night with Alice and meeting and falling for Jasper, the blind date with Rosalie and Emmett. I want to continue reading it all, it was so good.

You made your character's so likable. Even Edward when he was being rude, but as you know, I forgive Edward anything. *sigh*

I would love to have seen Jasper and Emmett making cupcakes! lol

Cx

first of all, you write dialogue very well, realistic.

Second, you write men very well, right down to their playful teasing.

I think you could have done a whole book of the Three's Company treatment.

I like your energitic and exitable Edward, not stuffy.

Who had the nipple ring?

MOG

I 3 this...Cute story!

Loved it...I could so see you continuing this and going into the senior year.

Very cute! Liked it lots!

that was a really good story. it would definitely be something i'd read if it was expanded in to a full story. it has a really good plot and im interested in how edward and bella develop.

Gen, this was FANTASTIC! I can't believe it's your first fic. It's so well written! You should definitely write more. Seriously. I'd read more from you in a heartbeat!

Shan

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Syndeytwilightmum-

What I wouldn't give to be in her shoes...lol! Great story for your first ExB. I hope Brandi liked it as well:) I know I did.

Theresa

Gen this was amazing shame its only one-shot but truly otterly amazing fic

Loved it..

Also loved Jasper Whitlock LOL

Nic

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That was great . I really enjoyed reading it. I would LOVE to read more I hope you continue writing.