| Reviews for Linda The Cocaine Chronicles |
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MildlyInsane 6/16/10 . chapter 1That's odd... I don't believe that Becker would have called Linda a bitch though... Also your format is a bit off. There should be a new paragraph every time someone new speaks. e.g: "blah blah blah," Reggie said. "Bleep," Becker yelled back. "Bleep you, sucka!" Reggie retorted. Instead of: "blah blah blah," Reggie said. "Bleep," Becker yelled back. "Bleep you, sucka!" Reggie retorted. It's a lot easier to read with the more frequent breaks, and much more obvious who is saying what. :) |