The story begins as if I were inside a person's diary, reading every move as it progresses to a point of an interesting meeting for the first time, a subject with desirable features. The opening is precise, letting you ventre into the rest, which, well is left up to the imagination.

Ha! I found it on my own! Anyway, awesome! Hurray for putting your first fic online! You definitely need to write more... preferably Yugioh though, but this was still great. Keep up the awesomeness!