Keep going with this. I do like the story.

If you keep going, then I'll write a more detailed review. Right now I don't have much detail to work with. Besides, you've already got comments on grammar, so no need for me to add to that.

But keep this story going.

You're welcome again. :)

I still think I did badly, Dx

Good but put more detail into the story. Hint things and decribe things instead of telling the reader

But still good

I like the plot for this; it seems interesting, and I can't wait to read more. Some small errors in grammar, but they can be fixed. Considering English isn't your native language, I can understand the grammatical errors, though.

I'll be open as a beta soon,(around on the 11th, which is when school ends for me) so if you need one, I can try and help you.

Overall: Please continue this story. :)

I'm pretty sure there is more to this story to tell so please keep it going. You never know how good it will be if you don't try.

Okay... so I really, really like this story. (: The grammer is good, the plot is good, everything is just... awesome. But you know what they say; there's always room for improvement.

Good job. -thumbs up- Please continue.

.Eva.