Whoa, that was one really awsome story, but I should tell you, the spelling of the blade creatures is Hork Bajir.

this story was totally long and i have to say it sucked. it was so unrealistic. the animorphs would never just spill everything like that,

Now I understand why it's "The Pain". It's called PUNCTUATION! ahh! headache!

hey it's me again!

Hey it's me! :-

Needs more paragraphs, otherwise ok.

To tell you the truth, a lot of the characters were kind of OoC, so...It's a nice effort really, and I'd give it a 6. Is this your first stab at a fic? Because it is really nice for a first time. (Please don't get offended it it's not!)

How many times has this plot been used? Ugh. Please do something at least a little original. And my gah, that whole part about Gem was just gross. I write sap, way too much sap, but this was almost comical. I mean, please, how long has he even known this girl and he's like obsessed with her. And at the beginning it said something about a Yasmine Bleeth poster of her in underwear...Uh, no thank you, *too* much information, though something like that is pretty typical I guess. But anyway, I really did not like James. He was just weird. Okay, so they tell him about the invasion and he wants to make a website? Please. Even an idiot wouldn't do something like that. I know so because I happen to be one most of the time. One more more thing...one David was enough, and at least KA's version was cool and wasn't some freaky computer nerd pervert. If I sound mean I'm really not meaning to be, honest. With some more original plots I think you could be a good writer.

Hmmm...kinda hard to read when there are no paragraphs, and the grammer needs a little work, but I still liked it! Is this your first fic? Well, practice makes perfect so write more, okay?