Wow...that was haunting and good. Very interesting idea how they all seperated. I love how Helga is like in the beginning. "They think I'm oblvious but I know. I always know."

Interesting challenge and even better story telling. I like this style you've chosen here , it's almost as if I'm watching a movie and the camera moves from one character to the next. I can almost hear their thoughts as whispers and their saddness grips me. So much emotions mixed in a pot!

Great work m'dear. :)

-Noona1

That was an effective portrayal of a love trangle, and your characterisation of the four founders was very interesting indeed. They had distinctive narrative voices, and so the story was easy to follow - it had a natural flow.

My only critisism is that the language didn't match very well with the speech of the time it was supposed to represent, which didn't gel with the first person narrative.

Still, it was a clever idea and I liked your interpretation of why the founders split to be believable. Well done.

*envious* it's a good story and you can really get it and it sorta fits in with the whole founders story. you always wonder what happened to them an this is just awesome!

I have to admit I was confused at first and I had to re-read it a couple of times before it made sense because I understood the changing POVs but not who was talking when. I understood it the third time around though. It was a well -written story and it was interesting to think that it was Rowena and not Salazar who caused the problems between the 4 founders. Great job :)

This was really well written. I don't usually read Founders stuff, but this is nice and I felt that you gave them each a personality. :D YAY.

Nice work.

Lucy*

I felt so sorry for all of them and I didn't find it confusing at all. This was brilliant. Favouriting.

Ohh, sad :'(

It was good though, really good. An interesting idea on why Salazar left the founders four.

I love this! I had no problems keeping up with who was who - you characterized them so beautifully! The last five lines summed the fic up perfectly, and the whole formatting was great!

Thank you sososo much for sharing this!

It's nice :) I like stories with several POVs. I'd never read anything about the founders.

it was a bit confusing but i love the way you formatted it(:

This is really interesting. Albeit confusing at first, but this is really really good.

I never quite know what to expect when I come across a Founders fic, but I'm pleasantly surprised by this. I'm amazed that you managed to draw me into their lives, and show me their relationships in so few words. I feel like the changes in POV, while they do take a few seconds to realise who's talking, they work better than they should do (which I don't know how that makes sense, but it does in my head)! While it was possibly too short to explore this properly, which I know wouldn't have worked in this style, I lovelovelove the way you've started to present each of the characters - when I think of them, I think of stereotypes and perfection, but your people are more real than that. Personally, I'd LOVE to read a longer Founders fic in which these sorts of characterisations are developed further. Well done, indeed!

Sweet! Good writing, I loved it.

This is a very interesting perspective on how they sepparated, on how the founders era was over. I really liked it it was interesting and dramatic.