First, I am so excited that they finally made a cateogory for this series. I have been wishing for it for a long time.

The only problem with the grammar is that sometimes you use the wrong verb. For example: She knew how horrible I is. It should be: She knew how horrible I was. For not reading it over you did really well.

As for the story it may be because you are the first one to write a story for this series combined with the fact that it was in Heathcliff's point of view but I love it.

Very well-written :)