I really liked this chapter and how you went into detail about the Items, magic and the SeeD's in general. I like your take on them, you make them seem like something out of the real world instead of out of a video game, I really love it when an author manages to do that when writing about a video game.

Also the little bit of History there was awesome :)) i really like your take on things, Cant wait to read more!

Jade

Hey so this was a good chapter. I really liked how you dived into the Forest Owls dynamics and how they are dealing with Demilee. She's a real strange one, but she's growing on me, I cant wait to see what you have in store for her.

Jade

Irvine is going to get a Selphie sized beat down! lol Man I cant wait to read that!

Good job on this chapter, nothing really to say about this chapter, Other than I cant wait to see whats going on with Cid :))

Jade

:)) I loved this chapter! All the detail that you put into this was awesome. there were times when I felt like I was there in the middle of the battle/escape. You have your own style of writing battle scenes, I really liked it.

I have to say, That You have gotten down Seifer's Character. He was perfect in this chapter. :))

I cant wait to see what happens next!

Jade

Im Back! *waves*

A lot happened in this chapter. And I gotta say Selphie kicked some ass! And I foresee a painful interrogation session in Irvine's Future ;) Selphie always gets what shes wants *laughs*

Seifer as always is a badass :))

I knew the Chancellor was a shady guy who wasnt going to make it through the whole story, Glad I was Right.

Got this read and reviewed a week later than I wanted to, but it was worth the wait :)) Sadly Im not going to be reading or reviewing the next chapter yet. Im going to read/review it tomorrow or today depending on how you look at it lol

Great job on this chapter as always!

Jade

I've actually been keeping my eye on this story since joining , and it's quite a journey so far. Your characterization of the characters, especially Squall, are well done. There were a few grammatical errors and awkward sentences, but the premise is pretty strong. Very interested in this alternate version of events as well as who the Children of Darmis are. Also, during Martine's scene, maybe you could have described a bit more on the disappearance of the moon?

This just keeps getting better and better! :)

I really liked how you started out this chapter, with Caraway. He's a fascinating character from the game that in my opinion didnt get a lot of screen time, and writers dont seem to care enough about him to really explore his character. Im really glad to see that there is more to your Fury Caraway than War :))

Seifer, gotta love him! lol Cant wait to see what his motives are for being there and for why he resigned from Garden.

Keep up the fantastic work!

Jade

Ohh Seifer is now in the custody of the SeeD, this is about to get very interesting! I cant wait to see what Squall's reaction is to this!

I cant wait to found out what Irvine and Selphie missions are, I love them working together, Poor Guy having to be subjected to her driving *laughs*

Great job on this chapter!

Jade

Hey Liked this chapter!

I found your background on Quistis really good, I always had the idea that when she was adopted that she was nothing more than a trophy kid. I Like your characterization of Quistis, Your keeping her very close to how she was in the game, but your allowing her to grow up and mature.

Your version of Squall and Seifer is everything that I look for when reading a story. I like the fact that even though you have changed the background of the characters somewhat, they are still them.

I've never been a Rinoa fan, but your version of her, is a good one. She's actually thinking before she acts but she still retains that child-likeness that made her, her.

You can never go wrong with Irvine and Selphie :)) They are always awesome.

All in all its a really great chapter, I cant wait to see if the House is indeed in breech of contract and how they are paying for them.

Jade

Wow thats a hell of a chapter! Awesome job on this! Cant wait for the next chapter!

Jade

Yay soo happy you are back to writing this story!

Great job on this chapter! cant wait to see where it goes from here!

Jade

Wow, this was a very riveting chapter! You finally updated! Martine seems to be out for something, and I'm glad the sharpshooting cowboy made his entrance!

Update!

Hey like the story so far, cant wait to read more and see where this goes!

keep up the great work! :)

Jade

Loved this. The atmosphere, the storyline, the way you write...Can't wait for the next chapter.

Wow wonderful start so far! u pinned Squall's character right on! I appreciate that! this new fruit seller...i wonder who could be, and is seifer interested in her or rinny...or both? lol haha well i look forward to see if the seeds and the Caelum militia can kick Galbadia out of there!

UPDATE SOON!