To me, you have them both very much in character, and the situation feels tense and tragic but in a sense also truly special and intimate. It gives the sensation like something is really coming to an end, which makes the atmosphere impressive.

I think it would be lovely if you could add a second chapter about how they dance (and maybe even die. brr), but you don't need to mind my random impressions ;)

Anyhow, love the story, congratulations!

A poignant, beautiful little piece. Your imagery is excellent, as well; I can picture it all perfectly. (Btw, since it's a one-shot, you probably want to change the status to 'complete'.) All in all, it was very well-written. Nice job with characterization.

Thanks,

Sora(:

The plot was well-written and you got the characterization right. But, why didn't you give the opening more pharagraph and space? It's quite uncomfortable to read but it was okay toward the end.

The language and the way they spoke was formal and I personally liked it! Good job! This fic really made my day.

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