 Dullard 6/12/10 . chapter 1Jazmine's wild imagination seems to be a tad bit TOO wild, if you ask me. Slipping in and out of reality and 'pony land' can't be very healthy. ..I like the idea of it, though. It's as if she really is aware of the true state of affairs in her life, and is only pretending to believe the white lies that adults are hand-feeding her; that imaginary land being a sort of escape and something to distract herself from it all. It's an interesting and very creative trait that you've granted her. I think it adds a bit more depth to her character. More depth, I think, than what she'd probably ever originally be portrayed with.
Having read your other Boondocks fic (which I really need to go back and review at some point), I know that your take on Jazmine leaves her a tad more clever than she appears to be in the cartoon/comic. This, of course, stayed true in this oneshot as well. ..I like that, both here and there.
So, even with the minor, though very flattering new character traits that you've granted Jazmine, I feel that everyone remained perfectly, totally, very much believably in character; something that not all fan-fiction writers can successfully pull off. Not only that, but your descriptions, word flow, and chosen vocabulary was all very remarkable. Needless to say, I loved it. ..Also, your ending line was very, very cute. |