|Reviews for It's over|
| yinspirit 7/12/11 . chapter 1
Hooray for awesome storys like this one.
| Josh Dragonheart 4/29/11 . chapter 1
wow, i've never seen/read so much kissing in one fanfic. nice work by the way.
| No named one 4/16/11 . chapter 1
It is wonderful :D
I like the way you write. Your English is very good and I like that Zelda is telling him her feelings :)
| Roman Juliet 12/29/10 . chapter 1
Well. I can say honestly, this wasn't what I expected. The emotions are vivid, to such an extent that I could feel and understand them myself, even though these are emotions I have never felt so intensely in my life. I did have a boyfriend, once. But the emotion here is by far unmatched by even mine. Mine was an empty longing to fill the void within myself, while here is true love. So similar, yet so different. Of course, I did notice a few minor mistakes, such as Zelda "seelping." lol But overall, it's close to perfect in my eyes. I love a story with vivid descriptions of the characters' feelings, and here I could smile and frown with Link, while blushing along with Zelda. My rating: 4. What beauty!
| The Pilot 12/25/10 . chapter 1
I must offer my most sincerest appology for not being able to review this when I said I would. Some serious personal matters arose that lasted more than a month.
I must say, you have a most interesting story here. The portrayal of the characters really delves deep internally, bringing their vast inner turmoils to light - a must-have characteristic of a quality piece. The idea of how much of a struggle both Link and Zelda go through in expressing their feelings towards one another is extremely well-developed, and rivals at least several, if not many of the stories on my favorites list. The part where Zelda confesses her love to Link while he's awake was my most favorite, not because Zelda admitted her feelings to him (though that is always great in any Zelda story as well), but because of the "sitting on the edge of your seat" atmosphere that the scene created due to Link's initial reaction of freezing, which causes Zelda to start to despair, before Link manages to convince her that her affections are returned. Romantic tension is another must in a story that looks to rise above the others, and in my opinion, you did a wonderful job.
The only areas that could be improved are some grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure, however I understand the difficulties of writing a story in a language that the author might not be proficient in. Other than that, as I said above, this is a wonderful story that will tug on the reader's heart-strings, and reward them with a beautiful romantic experience of two young lovers who have gone through much strugles to find each other. I look forward to reviewing your other work, though it may take a while, with my real-life schedule being what it is right now. *Gives a flyby salute in the Cygnus Spaceworks XM-1 Missileboat*
| Lady Mai-Mai 10/7/10 . chapter 1
My, my, my, this story is... AMAZING!
I luaghed, I cried, I started to belive in love once again!
damn, i sound like an idiot, but it is true! I love this story!
| ShiningwingX 9/22/10 . chapter 1
Pretty good! Especially for a first, and given that English isn't your native language this was still pretty well written. I really liked how descriptive you were when it came to the thoughts and personalities of Link and Zelda. It was really well done.
I will say that there WERE still a few grammatical errors in there. I notice some frequent use of the word 'could' where 'would' should have been used. There was also an instance where you said the nurses 'attended' to the wounded. The word 'tended' would have been better there. Tense was another factor. I noticed a couple of instances where you used the wrong word tense for certain situations. It didn't happen much but it was there.
Also, you don't need to add the hyphens in front of the quotations. That might save you a bit of time writing in the future.
Long story short, this was pretty well done considering everything. A few grammatical and tense errors here and there but definitely a well thought out one-shot. Your style of writing is very good, it just needs a little bit of polish. This is much better than most stories I've seen where English is a second language though. Well done.
| glamoursage 9/21/10 . chapter 1
Yes, that's actually true that there could be a chance that her people would scoff or give very low opinions of them together. But they must know that Link must receive recognition, right?
I was relieved when Link finally kissed her. What's life without taking chances, yes?
I laughed when you wrote that whenever someone asks them how they felt of being together, they lacked words. I have two hypotheses for that. Is it because they lacked words because love was something not meant to be defined but rather, experienced? Or is it because they hesitate from how they would contempt about their answer?
Anyways, I also loved this story, the prequel as well.
| ZeldaLover29 9/6/10 . chapter 1
This was a very sweet story. I did notice that sometimes there would be a pause in a sentence. For example-"when they were together… they… lacked of words." This could have been re-written without the pauses-"when they were together, they lacked of words."
I felt this was unnecessary, but if that is your writing style then I can't really complain.
A couple mistakes in grammar(an example is the quote above, it should be-"when they were together… they… lacked THE words") but I believe that any story written in a second language would have a couple mistakes. Only about five percent of the story had errors, so it didn't really detract from the reading.
Of course, grammar is my weak point, so I shouldn't be lecturing about it.
All in all it was very touching, and I enjoyed it.
| KawaiiGurl101 8/14/10 . chapter 1
I thought it was a break up story when I read the title. XD
Anyway it was really awesome.
| LinkLuver3 8/9/10 . chapter 1
This was excellent! I really liked the variations of your words. As a Link/Zelda shipper myself, it was a nice story for my romantic mind. I have a question: did you, by any chance, use an online translater sometimes? It felt as if you did.
Check out my story, please!
PS: Are you really from Chile?
| SoonToBeActress 6/17/10 . chapter 1
Goodness! So much kissing! :) I enjoyed your story very much. And advice I would give you is to look over your work and correct the grammar and spelling mistakes. When you correct it, it makes it a lot easier to follow, and gives you more reviews. Keep writing!
| sippurp123 6/14/10 . chapter 1
That was such a romantic story, i like how you wrote the emotions of the characters so well. So sweet!
| Lady.Zayriah 6/14/10 . chapter 1
This was a very good story! ) I enjoyed it a lot. There were afew grammatical errors, but that is probably due to English being your second language. Like when Link was "surprised to hear the young sovereign of Hyrule spoke in such a manner" the sentence should have been "surprised to hear the young sovereign of Hyrule speak in such a manner". So, besides the odd error here and there, you did a very excellent job.