|Reviews for Journal Entries|
| Puckabrinaluver 4/19/13 . chapter 9
Deep, man, very deep.
| Anonymous Reader 12/2/12 . chapter 2
Maybe not quite as blunt a chapter name next time, look for somethingmore original to call it, and even if you just put July 2nd, 2099 or whatever year it is, it would be an improvement over "Seven days had passed." You could've called Chapter 1 "The Beginning of Eternity." Feel free to take that name is you like it. :D Also, midway through the page, I totally forgot that this was supposed to be a journal entry. Sorry, if I am being a bit harsh. :D Also, I'm quite curoius as to what Winnie Foster has been up to these past few years. Has she dated anyone? Has she spent long nights pondering whether or not to drink from the stream? Does she still sit outside the fence each day, waiting for Jesse, waiting for anyone, really? Does Winnie stare at the woods in longing, or avoid looking at it entirely? Does she sit by the stream, feel it rush over her fingers, but not have the courage to drink it at first? What has become of her family? Are her parents alive?
| Guest 11/25/12 . chapter 9
when is she going to be reunited with jesse
| fhgykyulu 10/29/12 . chapter 1
| Guest 10/14/12 . chapter 9
WOW. This story is really deep, but I think you should keep on writing. I like the way that you give Winnie an innner voice, and extreme mixed feelings for Jesse. For ideas, I'm kinda thinking that Winnie will find Jesse, A) with another woman and no memory of Winnie and she has to help him remember or B) Find him mentaly ill for the inability to find her and Winnie nurses him back to mental health. Anyways I love it and you have very obvious talent for writing so keep on writing! :)
| Lmb111514 9/21/12 . chapter 9
This is great so far, please update again soon!:)
| Ally babyy3 8/7/12 . chapter 9
| Ally babyy3 8/7/12 . chapter 8
| Ally babyy3 8/7/12 . chapter 7
Woah, definitely getting good. The beginning of the story was "eh." but this is definitely "WOW!" now.
| Ally babyy3 8/7/12 . chapter 6
The dialouge wasn't dry in this chapter, really good. The vocab is getting more appropriate, definitely. And I really do like the inner thoughts of Winnie. Although I do believe that in this situation it would be natural for her character to become significantly darker, but I think it's a little TOO dark. You're sort of losing the essence of Winnie in a way.
| Ally babyy3 8/7/12 . chapter 5
Getting better...but like I said, short chapters. I read this in like a minute.
| Ally babyy3 8/7/12 . chapter 4
This chapter was alright :)
| Ally babyy3 8/7/12 . chapter 3
Chapters are short, for one. Also, this is supposed to be set in late 1800's. Use that vocabulary, not modern vocabulary. Try to make it more realistic.
| Ally babyy3 8/7/12 . chapter 2
Winnie, in the story, was born in 1870. In the book she was 10 when she met the tucks (1880). Therefore, she would be 17 in 1887. Just a small story-error. If you're basing it on the movie it's technically wrong information considering it's based on the book anyway.
Besides that, I like it.
| Guest 7/28/12 . chapter 9
please do not give up on this story, Winnie and Tuck have o find each other! please!